Duel

Dredging up dusty archives

of a soul gone mad,

You reappeared in the rebellion

of a dying flame.

Untamed;

your amber pelt swaying

in the flutter of smoke-

Appeasing, 

my feverous thirst for you.

Remorsefully, only you-

Linger in the sweet fragrance, of

the soot I exhale.

Suffocating;

Shall, I forgo of this noose?

Disinfect the corridors where you’re stained?

I can no longer tell-

For whom the last bullet will ring.

Indisposed, I

retreat ten paces,

 tossing emptiness midair at the moon;

Bursts of our shattered remains, blowing, like-

dust full of stars. 

I bid us adieu,  

deplete the anecdotes where you live-

Rest no more,

under the peels of my despair.

February 03, 2015 - Rude Lizard

Reviews

[R.M.C]

Another great piece of imaginative writing. Your vocabulary is extensive and you put it to good use. I wish my vocabulary was as extensive as yours, like a library in your head. Well done.

[Jamestown]

Rude my friend, this is bad to the bone, imagery, word placement, and
flow flawless, bravo! Thanks for sharing.

[rudelizard]

I am much obliged Jamestown. It was a pleasure to write this piece and I'm thrilled you enjoyed it.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A most delicate piece that uses imagery to pound at the reader, well placed and raw, well done, great read.

[rudelizard]

Thank you so much Thomas. I am grateful for your review and most glad you enjoyed this piece. Honored by having you stop by my page. Cheers friend!

[Ed Fagan]

Finally a write I can relate to completely. Nice job, much respect!

[~]

Really blown away by the way how you obliterated every sense one by one.. great imagery! "under the peels of my despair" hit the right spot..

[rudelizard]

I am stoked that you enjoyed this piece. This one means a lot to me, and I am thrilled that something here hit the right spot, poetically speaking :) Thanks for showing me love Moonskittles, always!

[BeeBev]

Beautifully laid out and easy to read due to the structure. just floats off the tongue when read aloud really enjoy this one look forward to more of your work.

[rudelizard]

Thank you so much BeeBev. I appreciate you taking the time to give me your thoughts. Glad you enjoyed the poem.