Anatomy and Questions

Love through the eyes of a scientific man

I was made with two feet

One to follow the other

Travelling in one direction

Travelling to one goal

I was made with one heart

Pumping blood and emotion

Feeling life continue

Feeling desires for more than life

I was made with one brain

Demanding logic reign over all

Calculating the simplest route

Calculating the possibilities down to one

What happens when my brain short circuits?

It tells my heart that love is a fallacy

Instructs my feet to bypass enjoyment

But drives me to succeed in society's needs

What happens when my heart skips a beat?

My feet stumble and drive me to the ground

Causes inattentiveness in the brain

But gives me such happiness I cry

What happens when my feet can't agree?

This brain of mine may short circuit

This heart of mine may skip a beat

But they fear nothing

Because you are at the end of each road

You can reestablish the connection in my brain

You can squeeze my heart into a proper pattern

You can straighten my feet

So that I may end up at your front door

You have to agree

Wouldn't that be a lovely sight?

Author's Note

Feel free to comment and criticize. Especially looking for help on form and rhythm. Been trying to work in those areas recently. Thanks!

Reviews

[Lusus Naturae]

This was a nice piece to which I revel and it sort of reads as if it were my thoughts. Might I consider you reread the seventh stanza for a better wording, however it was still an interesting and inspiring read.

[D.J. Anderson]

I LOVE the comparisons and hidden metaphors in this!!!! This poem has a very interesting flow and beat about it that match the words brilliantly!!!! This is one of those poems that can easily be considered a true work of art. As someone else wrote in a review, this particular poem inspires a writer to write. Well done my friend, well done.

[nazia]

This combination of our anatomy and the message conveyed is unique in its own way.. well conceived

[James O'Rourke]

Thank you for the compliment nazia.

I'm bit of a science geek so I thought combining science and love would spark something for my writing. Hope to see more of ya in the future!

[nazia]

you're welcome :).. Hope to c more of ya too

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is very good. I like poetry that make me want to write poetry. This poem can. Your powerful thoughts open the mind to places and visions.
"You can reestablish the connection in my brain
You can squeeze my heart into a proper pattern
You can straighten my feet
So that I may end up at your front door"
Would be nice. If we could be repaired. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote