Silence

kinda prose.. I don't know if it's good...

The silence has consumed my body,
  taking up every inch of my being.
I've plunged into arctic waters; I shake with a frozen core
  but it's not only the cold that sends shiver throughout me.
There's no one here. No one with a warm blanket;
  with a warm heart.
I'm here alone, in this barren land of ice and snow.
Sometimes I wish it to be that way; to have a place of my own with no one else saying or doing anything.
Yet, once I have it, I want them back in my life.
  Anyone, everyone, someone.

A lesson I've yet to learn, but seem to know.

Reviews

[Silere]

Nicely written.. you have created great imagery here.. I can feel the loneliness in every word. The confusion at the end is very common.. we never truly know what we want or need and quite often don't know when to differentiate between the two especially when it comes to letting someone into our lives... but the risk is almost always worth it. You show a lot of vulnerability in this poem.. which makes you stronger than you probably think... Thank you for sharing!

[SarahCortland]

i like this it reminds me of how i feel now. My parents are divorcing and it seems only days ago that i was stuck going over to family parties every saturday i used to say i could do without seeing my family all the time. Now i majorly regret that because i lost half of my family and half of my life. Now there are days i wish greatly i could go back to those days when i knew they would be there to hold me when i cried and that i was loved and safe. Now that its all gone id do anything for it back. SO great poem it let my feelings be written better than i could say them a definite 100/100

[Nikki]

Very lovely and well described

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I like this poem. It was very enjoyable. It makes me question myself. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Abhinav]

it is good.....
nice poem from you again

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sounds like one of those emotional freezes where you don't want to be round anyone and you don't know why... I agree that last line is great... we all have instincts but often we ignore them.

[Rachel]

Hmm...the silence of loneliness. Not what I expected when I clicked it, but it wasn't a bad surprise. I'm actually kind of happy that it wasn't what I expected, because I like this one. Good job. :D

[Kaitlin]

i love this..especially the last line.
lol does your inspiration for this poem come from the Alaskan cruise you took? You compare everything to the arctic and coldness so that would make sense. But i totally agree which the analogy between coldness and loneliness. it makes a lot of sense.
And your not alone..you have me! :)

[Shalini Dinesh (Poet's ..]

Lonliness is something that is really horrible and don't worry you will have someone, anyone and at last EVERYONE you need..... lovely poem

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

For some reason, I see a lot of confusion in this piece. I see a person who seems to be torn between not needing anyone and an itching feeling to let someone in. This person has such an incredible strength, but is vulnerable. This vulnerability is deep, deep within. There is conflict because of a disconnected spirit. It almost leads me to believe this person jumped into the icy water so they could feel something. I found it interesting that the ultimate giver of life, water, seems turned against this person. It creates a disturbing picture. This poem has a lot going on. It's Heavy!