The Roaring Glare

The Roaring Glare

A Poem by Rachael
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For my english class. Poem that uses sound devices to create imagery

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And when the lightening flash shone through the window,
they were seen walking by with slightly stumbling steps,
the sound no one could have mistaken,
a soft tap…tap…tap.


You must not dare look into their eyes;
it is said to be a curse.
That awful sound of just their passing
will leave your ears in a great burning.


And from the lightening the thunder booms.

So piercing was the noise it made
and in addition to the curse,
it was a thing no one should ever hear,
a sound apart from any else.


What it sounded like you might just wonder,
to find out, though, you must look into their eyes;


And hear the thunder.

© 2011 Rachael


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This was fantastic. I wish my writing was this good when I was younger. Keep it up, you just might surprise yourself how really good you become.

Antonio :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


The last line was awesome! You did a very nice job with the imagery. I like how you described the fear of not looking into their eyes, then at the end we have to.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Lot of good sounds at work here. It's very focused on he auditory sense and works fairly well here. Well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


well done amazing piece
sorry for the late review

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The sounds of this episode rang through my mind.
You really created this from the perspective of a director.
Every detail seemed so strategically placed. Technically,
this poem is most impressive, but you still made room to
steer the reader's emotions and create pure suspense...
even with the sounds omitted. Plus...you make me want
to check under my bed and my closet. What a thrill!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Makes me want to look into their eyes. A fun and interesting read. Good work.



Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was great and the imagery was friggin' awesome! I could almost feel the lightning's high voltage strike the black sky, and hear the relentless roar of the thunder torture my eardrums. Great job! 100/100

Posted 13 Years Ago



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