Giggles

Dark, so very dark, and cold, the chill from the old house seeps into my soul, freezing my insides. I am in one of my nightmares, the house clinking, clanging, crackling with my every step. The darkness so heavy you can feel it, the cold, musty air impossible to escape. I hear the click of a lock some where deep within the house. The giggling follows, not a joyous sound, but an evil one, a sound of terrible pleasure. I run, not knowing where the laughter is coming from, but knowing I have to escape it, the house whining with every step I take, as if the boards under my feet just barely hold my weight. The giggling continues, louder this time, closer. I scramble up a set of stairs, the giggles growing louder. I dash into a room and turn around, gasping for breath. Silence, I am safe, for now.

Author's Note

This story isn't very good, but I decided to post it anyways. If you have any ideas to make it better, please share. :)

Reviews

[Emmy]

Isnt very good? I loved it! I really felt like i was there, like it was me running! Now, this isnt a very big deal but if u really wanted to be picky with it, id make "I run, not knowing where the laughter is coming from, but knowing I have to escape it. The house whining with every step I take, as if the boards under my feet just barely hold my weight." Into one sentence by putting a coma instead of a period. But of course thats just my opinion! Whatever u want to do with it is up to you! I loved it, keep up the good work!:)

[Sadiesmiles]

Thanks! I appreciate it when people share their opinions, it helps a lot.

[Emmy]

Anytime!:)

[Clara]

Sadie, you totally underestimate you're ability to write. This is amazing!!! I felt as if I was actually there, experiencing what you wrote. The wording is very clever, and you used pretty powerful adjectives. Keep it up Sadie! :)

[Sadiesmiles]

I'm glad you liked it!

[Lindsay G]

Change "was safe, for now" to "am safe" because you changed tenses. Otherwise, amazing. Fabulous.

[Sadiesmiles]

Thanks! I will be sure to change that.