Secrets

I feel the words in my head
I feel them in my heart
I see your face
And I want to let them out

But for a reason
Unknown to me
And reason I have yet to find
I simply can't say them

I let them swirl around my mind
They float there
Yelling for me to just tell you
To just allow myself to fall

I see the words
But I still am unable
To piece them all together
To form the words I wish to say

I see you holding me
Loving me like no one else ever has
Caring for me in a way only you could
Seeing who I am on the inside

I see it all
And I wish I could write it all down
I wish I could share it with others
But a reason unknown to me

I'm not allowed....

So these pictures
These words
These thoughts
Will forever stay a secret in my mind....

Author's Note

I am a true romantic simply can't help it

Reviews

[ivizarx]

Really awesome write, you are one with great potential in the romantic subject of poetry. And no worries, the things you're good at thinking about is the best things to write about.
as for constructive criticism, there's a grammar error on line 7, should be "find" instead of "fine". Also, try writing on a meter, I think that if this were written on one it would've really brought it out, not to say your structure is a negative, but that there's always room for improvement. Another suggestion is metaphors, they really add "kick" to poetry like no other. It takes lots of imagination but work likes a muda F***a if you can get 'em in lol. Did enjoy it. you are really a great writer and all my reviews, take 'em with a grain of salt n no worries. really glad you sent me an RR.

[An owl on the moon]

You let out the sweet secret so gently... so lovingly... like a soft breath... A beautiful heart shared in such silences.

[LittleMissSunshine :)]

This was a simple, fabulously worded piece.

For some reason, when one falls in love, we are so scared of rejection or denial, we simply give up on the hope that they might return our affections.
It'd be awesome if you continued this poem for another few stanzas defeating your fear.
Great piece. Very well written.

[The Analog Kid]

Very tastefully romantic. First person makes it a more personal feel.

[misha]

This is a great write, I can relate to this one so much. I lost a lot of great chances because of me being scared to fall. Great job once again!

[BrokenGirl]

This is gorgeous

[Alicia Nicole]

This is simply beautiful

[Calypso]

Secrets are never safe

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A perfectly designed piece, well done, loved it

[TJ]

Beautiful words Sarah. Tell me, what is more sad than love unexpressed?

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

A..W..E..S..O..M..E..!!!!