Perched

Perched

A Poem by Sami Khalil
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Perched to fly off into the unknown...A sad romance poem...

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Perched/……………..BY Sami Khalil

Perched to fly off into the unknown…A romance poem.

The Poem:

 

The wind stops its whips

The rain halts its drips

The candle burns its tips

The ocean idles its ships

Death tightens its grips

Luck plays its many chips

The joker shares his quips

A lady shows off her hips

The traveler longs for trips

A trace is found on blips

My name perches sadly

on your lethargic lips!

 


© 2014 Sami Khalil



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I like how you successfully made this into an interesting likeable piece. Using the same kind of rhyming words is harder then it looks especially trying to make the words all fit together to tell a meaningful story- which I thought you did a great job at that. Great writing

Posted 3 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Wow. Thank you so much dear poet for the lovely review and kind words. I had fun writing this. A kin.. read more
uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns

3 Years Ago

Well I liked your unique view of this
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

:).........
I felt the sadness of the persona towards the muse who no longer have that sparks . When the wine loses its taste and sparkle. Could it be a mistake or could there be someone else. ?

Posted 3 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Wow. You are right in your first assessment for it is about when love is lost to the unknown but by .. read more
So beautifully penned. Great work on the rhyme.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Wow. Thank you so much for the nasty review and sharing. Be blessed...:).....
loved the write and the rhyme scheme the photo was great

Posted 3 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Wow. Thank you so much dear poet for all you say and do. I appreciate the time and effort...:)........ read more
A poem so captivating and fun to read. I've read it 3 times already. Brilliant, Sami.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Wow. That is so good to hear. So glad you found it worthy. Many and many thank yous...:)........
Hooked from the beginning! Another great piece!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Wow. You have summed up your experience marvelously. Please send some read requests when you post ne.. read more
Savannah Bly

3 Years Ago

I will! Thank you!
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

^^~^^ :>)..................
I love the rhyming! Your poem snared me from the beginning. Well done friend.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Wow. So glad to know that and appreciate. Thank you so much...:).......
Chelsea Konigin

3 Years Ago

Your Welcome! :)
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

:)....................
This is beautifully romantic, I love the rhyming, and the images to go along with this piece! :D

Posted 3 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Wow. Thank you so much Bowers for this lovely visit. Always a breeze...:).................
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B.J
What a wonderful play on words leading to a great romantic poem

Posted 3 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

Wow. That was the purpose and you have nailed it on the head. So glad you have visited and shared..... read more
B.J

3 Years Ago

your most welcome
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

:)......................
I liked the way this poem built to its conclusion. It inspired me to write this tiny gift poem for you which you may keep as your own:

Lips

These things I’ve found
here and around:
Rains soak the ground.
Winds blow and pound.
Scents jolt the hound.
Lush, pink, and round,
your lips confound.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Aethereal

3 Years Ago

You're welcome! These tiny poems are good practice for me. They tune my mind.
Sami Khalil

3 Years Ago

I do like them. Looking forward to more in the future...:)...................

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Added on March 10, 2014
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Sami Khalil

Tuscaloosa, AL



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