Your Dream is my Life

Your Dream is my Life

A Poem by samparks,sam

Image result for Life dream want through you
Believe  in Yourself to  come  true  dream in life.
You need  to  maintain the confidence, beloved  every time
One day someone can Hug you so tight
You  are the one for someone make to smile
Someone  wants to you for forever in this life
You need to  one life, one dream, one smile forever in life
What are your choice  for her, choice of value in her life
You can activate  yourself be  moral and value in  her life
She also wants to sing life song in your hug with a smile every time
Dream is  the   visible aspect to alive you in her life
Life is a treasure of feeling, of the dream, of each value  life
Need to care with secured for converting dream in real life.

  


© 2016 samparks,sam



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Calm and true thoughts, its wonderful writing.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Nice thoughts at times seems a little disjointed in flow.
I like the value of emotions and the focus.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Samparks. sam,
Fun to see anothers viewpoint of life and love. Dreams are important and you have given it a voice in your poem. Dream and goal seem to walk together in this poem as well. Bless you Kathy

Posted 11 Months Ago


There are a few misplaced uses of the word "to." I like the message-a positive reminder to be good to your partner. We all need to here more words like that.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The over all message and emotion is wonderful. But it is a little hard to just fully enjoy with the misplaced and missing words between lines. Also I thought the line "one day someone could hold you so tight" could've had a follow up line. That would've given the poem more warmth. It is cute that you set it up so we are reading it as if we are in the guy's head

Posted 1 Year Ago


The theme here is good enough.. The only hurdle in understanding the full blast of it is the little mistakes in between the sentences which interrupt the flow in your composition.. The lines are scattered haphazardly.. But I like the meaning described here...

Posted 1 Year Ago


Love your poem. Converting dreams into real life are important. "She also wants to sing life's song in hugs and smiles every time. Nicely written and well expressed feelings. Keep up the good writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


True words for watching dreams and making them real...loving someone and also caring for them...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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samparks,sam
samparks,sam

Indian, India



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I am Chess player, My life always move step with thought of 10 steps ahead every time. Nature is my friend, Keep me smile. I start to write poems without experience of writing, but I can't believe my.. more..

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