I Dreamt of You Once

I dreamt of you once,

how your hair shone in a sombre cloud,

and bold eyes made me stammer,

made me sad for you weren’t real.

I began to worry, when again

your idle figure came before me,

in good weather at midday,

just a first radiant hallucination.

One fine evening in the rain

your form reluctantly presented

truer and more beautiful than before

I reached out to touch you

to find you more honest and corporeal

charming and graceful

than anyone ere I have never met.

Nevertheless, you faded from me

and I confess I wept,

desperately unable to retrieve you,

yet an angel or a delusion as you are,

cannot remain to humble me thus

if I am below and beyond deserving.

That won't stop me from

remembering your bewitching ways,

your lightness and your glow that I,

am found dreaming, and come to love.

Reviews

[Rhys Kihill]

So romantic. So powerful. Another winner.

[AprilRN1210]

now this is just tender, romantic, and sweet.. the flow is nice, the use of language skillful, and the rhymes delightful.. the message is clear and consistent and allowed the reader to feel the longing, the happiness, the bright light shining, and the beauty in the love.. IT felt real, simple yet elegant, relatable, and moving... nice job..

[Elle Thompson]

This is very pretty
I'm awful at line breaks, but I would chop up "and I confess I wept," and make it two lines, i think it would be more impactful

[Shaquana Adams]

I like this poem. Simple, yet beautiful :)