Whisper Loud

Whisper loud.
Immortalize my name 
in vibrant rumours. And

let my eulogy read that I
waged war on my emotions
but only partially won.

Does my division shine
in sombre conclusion?

If so, it represents

a nomadic disposition.

During the halcyon of the
night is when she visits,
effervescent and inspiring.

Will
I rise to the occasion?

Or will I fail

to imprint my

indulgent mannerisms?

When sunbeams are shining
brightly, is she as

distracted as I am?

The silence is so loud, and
so marvellous!

When the great designer runs
out of ink, will the end fall
upon us for my repentance?

Account is in overdraft, and I
am closing thoughts

to future cooperation.

Leave us not to gnaw upon
mortality. We wage dissent

on infractions 
we did not commit. 

Rather, redeem our atmospheres,

 and let us
make clear the words of
redemption.

Reviews

[Priyanka Natesh]

"When the great designer runs
out of ink, will the end fall
upon us for my repentance?"

Beautifully framed poem and I especially liked the above lines. Thank you :)

[Wolfhilde]

You created a beautiful poem. I especially liked the part ;

"let my eulogy read that I
waged war on my emotions
but only partially won."

Very well done and you used powerfull lines.


Wolfhilde

[lee von cleef]

make clear the words of redemption. We should all take the steps of action,examples
of deeds.good words in the end.

[MOON]

Well crafted write the inner journey the understanding of self a lifelong journey. beautiful deep rite.

[Alicia Schroeder]

I love this, great and differant :)

[Weiron]

powerful piece of introspective prose, wittily worded and eloquently expressed
fantastic write!

[imagination101]

Constructed with power and excellent wording!

[storiestotell]

Excellent penned poem!

[Myra Andrews]

Very well constructed

[Loner]

Nicely portrayed great expression ....