Stay A Shadow

Included in "Teardrop of Coloured Soul" Publishamerica. ISBN: HARDCOVER8327

You can be a shadow if you want to.
A dark shape that flickers like a
  candle flame.
A moth burns itself slowly
           in the flickering fire.
It did not intend to do so.
It was attracted to the light.
Foolishly it entered the flame
to find its death. It burned
in a brief flash of misunderstanding.
So, you can be a shadow if you want to.
You can bury your emotions
in the darkness of whatever shape
you pretend to be.
It is better to be this way.
For if you became as brilliant
as the light of the sun,
I might find myself attracted to you.
That would be dangerous.
Experience has taught me
that you would burn my devotion
like a moth in a candle flame.
Stay a shadow. That way I can
close my eyes
and imagine you are
not nearby. 

Reviews

[C.m.v.]

Captivating & emotional.

[freelancejouster]

wonderfully fluid

[Mary Chalmer]

brilliantly written

[joshua deathdealer]

I like this one..Excellent ending as well..xx

[smarie]

Well done... Brilliant

[snickerdoodle]

reminds me of a song by Jimmy Wayne, "Stay Gone" --a shadow already known but at a safe distance.*

Isn't it true, the epitaph for many bugs drawn to light or windshield: a brief flash of misunderstanding.
even the birds hit the glass mid flight, misunderstanding.
i once had a cat, who didn't understand the sliding glass door was closed, it was normally opened. Until one day, he rushed forward to get inside--and suffered the reality check. He learned not to leap, but caution.

paired away, i skipped over:
to find its death. It burned; That would be dangerous.
-
For if you became as brilliant
as the light of the sun, /If you became brilliant as the sun
Experience has taught me
that you would burn my devotion
like a moth in a candle flame./
Experience has taught
you would burn me
a moth in a flame.
-
*http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ELjlvLTUFvA&ob=av2e

[Richard Williams]

There's a calming ethereal quality here, mixed with the flame and moth in a nice way.

[imagination101]

Brillantly penned!

[storiestotell]

Well crafted!

[angelink]

An intense write. Wonderful :]