Hissing Water

Don't leave me.

Restless lights

tremble on and off.

Sanity bent and brown,

submissive living.

Drying clothes

tumbling around

and around

and around.

You are like a fire

that has been extinguished.

Glowing memory.

Hissing water.

Failing assassin

that kills the

wrong ambition.

Under wheels of

rolling indifference,

winter, spring, summer

and fall.

Succumbing to the

blaring ending.

Under sheets once white

and now

tattered and forgotten.

Reviews

[Thrinna Mae]

Wonderful imagery...Lovely poem...

[Kenneth S.]

Sweet.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

Missing someone is such a bad feeling for me too...

[Katie]

What a great poem!

[imagination101]

Fantastic words of imagery that makes this poem shine!

[storiestotell]

Nice job! An enjoyable read with great imagery that takes me on a journey!

[Raven Starhawk]

Stunning but thought provoking as it unleashes powerful images.

[Donald Meikle]

Suicidal? Autumnal indifference? Tattered and forgotten white sheets? It reads like pure misery, enjoying depression.
Not a shred of hope!

[Derek S.Keck]

This is a highly thought provoking piece. i love the repetitive imagery of the cycle or wheel that you allude to: Drying clothes/tumbling around/and around", creating, in my mind, imagery that provokes the everyday and the repetition that it entails. This imagery persists with the allusion to the seasons and "the wheel of/rolling indifference". That this muse of purpose, which could be symbolic of a lover, friend, or just an archetype of the loss of people in general to an indifferent world that doesn't stop, only continually tarnishes our pure minds as the wheel continues. I may be way off, but regardless, awesome write. I love this piece!

[Audrey Howitt]

Really beautifully done Chris.
Sanity bent and brown,
submissive living.

This could be so many of us