Becoming

Becoming

A Poem by sandpiper66
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A poem about motherhood and growth

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I celebrate two births
A little sprawling babe
Violent need
All arms and legs
The joyful pain of becoming
A cry in the night for
A mother’s arms


And of your birth, too
My sister, my friend, all
Curled up in that tiny, wrinkled fist
So strong.  All your hopes
Waiting to be born
Within you.  Fear not
You are enough.

© 2015 sandpiper66


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This is an honest, beautiful poem. Your voice comes through and the last line in particular gives me chills.

While the message is present and strong, the poem would work better with punctuation and without the capitalization at the beginning of each line, as it can be distracting. I hope you can use my feedback.

Best regards,

Ashley

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sandpiper66

8 Years Ago

Thank you.



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This is an honest, beautiful poem. Your voice comes through and the last line in particular gives me chills.

While the message is present and strong, the poem would work better with punctuation and without the capitalization at the beginning of each line, as it can be distracting. I hope you can use my feedback.

Best regards,

Ashley

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sandpiper66

8 Years Ago

Thank you.
there is newfound strength and purpose found in parenthood.

and that purpose is just waiting for birth and rebirth...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sandpiper66

8 Years Ago

Thanks, for reading.
An interesting observation. Yes, birth brings on changes in everyone associated with the event. Ripples in the pond of life.

Best regards,

Rick

Posted 8 Years Ago


sandpiper66

8 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and commenting. Much appreciated.
I enjoyed the poem. Real life poetry is the best poetry. Birth of child does change our view on life and living. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sandpiper66

8 Years Ago

Thank you, Coyote...I appreciate the comment.
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

You are welcome.

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Added on June 26, 2015
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Tags: child, life, grow, mother, motherhood, poetry

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