Passion

Life would never have been so long...

Days wouldn’t have appeared so short;

Struggles and problems wouldn’t disappear;

With each passing moment, nearer my goal would appear!

It is something that ignites our souls;

It is something that enlightens life.

From lazy sloths to fiercest warriors;

We could never see us transform!

Even in dynamic twists of time and tide,

Our vision remains unperturbed!

In spite of endless falls we all encounter;

We all continue to move one step closer...

It is not still, it is transforming.

With changing situations it changes forms!

Can take forms of unrelated objects;

Still it defines what we are!

It is passion that changes with age;

It is something that shapes our destiny.

No matter how clueless we all become at times;

It has the strength to put us together...

Always follow your mind it says,

And it is right almost always

Follow your passion to know who you are

Follow your passion to share vision

For not all are as lucky as the one;

Who knows to categorize, right and wrong!

 

 

 

Reviews

[Cyndy Robinson]

Wonderful poem about what passion motivates us to do. Some thoughts:, or suggestions: The fourth stanza is problematic. "It is not still, it is transforming. With changing situations it changes forms (redundent) you just said that in a different way in the first line. Can take forms, to many of the word form. I think I would just delete the whole stanza, aside from it transforms, not sure what it is adding. The last stanza, which has been previously picked on, lol, I am not sure where this last line is coming from. This does not seem to have anything to do with right and wrong, so it is just confusing. I would delete the last line and just leave it For not all are as lucky as the one. There are no rules in poetry, there is something called prose, I favor prose, because it is the clearest way to say what you want to say. I disagree with the comment about musicality. It isn't necessary unless you want to put it to music. Wonderful poem. The spice of reviewing is you get to be opinionated. Doesn't mean anything, just suggestions. Sometimes they work for you, and sometimes not.

[Schatzi]

Hi sansrity sinha,

Beautifully written! You have a very poetic voice.

Thanks for sharing!

Kind regards,

Schatzi

[sansrity sinha]

thank you so much!

[Valentine]

Our passions seem to follow our strengths. As we age strength depletes and so does passion. Valentine

[Emily]

Love it!!
Well done!
Keep it up!!

[sansrity sinha]

thank you! :)

[Stefano Segnan]

Hello to you! I liked the overall structure of the poem, but I think you could add more musicality in poems to make a greater impression on the reader.
The perspective is interesting, and the evolution of the idea you present is easy to fallow, albeit I do not agree with some parts, especially with the last two verses of the last stanza. But that's the good thing of reading different opinions.
Overall I think it is quite a good poem, and you could try experimenting with some rhythmic element you like to increase musicality.

[sansrity sinha]

hi,
thank you for the kind review..
I am a beginner..will improve.
thanks for the suggestions :)

[Krizito]

Passion is what makes us...pushes us...creates us.
This piece is beautiful and inspiring in terrific ways. Totally love this:)

[sansrity sinha]

thank you so much! :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

What a beautiful and inspiring write. Passion drives us to our goals. Passion is what takes us to where we want to go. Good one!!!!

[sansrity sinha]

thanks for such a beautiful review :)