Broken and Torn

How it feels to lose a friend.

Broken and Torn

 

By : Alasse Fefalas

 

Friends we once were
Now broken and torn
Our friendship was so mere
Leaves my soul forlorn

 

How did this happen
My nightmares come true
Why did you let it happen
My dreams torn into two

 

Depraved my heart is
Of your kindness and care
Scarred my heart is
Of leaving me so bare

 

No more can we return
To that little lie of ours
A friendship so brittle
It is now my greatest fear

Author's Note

Review please! ;)

Reviews

[Catastrophe]

Reading this gave me a cold feeling, kind of like i'm sitting outside and the cold breeze
just keeps passing me by
along with dead leaves
and people; people that stare and wonder
yet i hardly see or notice them. It gives me that sense of "alone"
and that's the feeling you get when you're outside on a cold windy day. I feel the pain in your lines;
great write.

[Ian]

Wow.
I could say these words to somebody.
This is a tough poem. It's has lots of emotion...
This is a wonderful piece!

My favorite lines were:

"No more can we return
To that little lie of ours
A friendship so brittle
It is now my greatest fear"

Great poem!

[Adela Muresan]

I really like the way you penned this vivid piece- it shows how scars kill the trust and bring on the fear.
Even dough, it flows pretty well I think you could make a few changes like the dreams twarn ,,in two,, instead of ,,into two,, ,and some other stuf...:P.

A.M.

[Tamme]

It's hard to continue on like nothing happened after a betrayal. People can forgive each other but it is impossible to erase from the mind.

[MandarinOranges]

laceyjane has that on eright..we've all lost a friend or two along the way. And it sucks! Almos as much as when you lose both a friend and a lover all-in-one. I get the impression that this is what this poem is about. Maybe not. Either way, it's well written and very emotional. Good job!

[laceyjane23]

Nice job, a lot of readers will be able to relate to this poem, i think everyone has lost a friend at one point or another.
laceyjane