Eclipse

A poem I wrote after seeing the lunar eclipse recently.

There is something mysterious

In the shadow of the moon

Framed by snowy trees,

A winter landscape

In a cloudless sky

 

Behind its darkening veil

The moon is a pure white,

Flawless crescent

 

I am torn between the site of it

And the site of your eyes

 

There is something mysterious

In the way you take my hand

Shadows fall behind us,

Your face is lit by the light of the moon

 

I feel like we could follow the moon’s beams

Until ever slowly,

The pale white disappears

And in the darkness

We’re left perfectly alone

Author's Note

I would love feeback on this poem!!

Reviews

[Tom A.]

Wow, awesome imagery! It was very intense, it sucked me right in. I liked the last two lines especially, they have a "huh...how about that?" kind of feel. Normally I don't do poetry, and I don't know anything about it but I liked how your flows, its easy/fun to read but still has substance.