WHEN I'LL BID ADIEU

WHEN I'LL BID ADIEU

A Poem by Saumya
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feelings of a student about saying goodbye to the school where she had studied for 14 years!!!!!!

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  When one day passes,
The other comes,
Everything changes,
Leaving some,
The 'LOVE', the 'CARE', the 'concern' and
'JOY', that I have received here, was a great fun.

Now has the day come to bid Adieu,
To these wonderful feelings I received.
When I remember, those days so sweet,
When I was a kid of four or five!!
My school taught me, the "ART OF LIFE"..

The way to 'sit', the way to 'stand', the way to
'take', the way to 'understand'
All of this, which were first to me unknown,
My teachers and parents made to me known.

Now, today, after days long back,
When i sit and remember those lovely days,
I can deeply feel the love, care and concern,

Besides those scoldings those days.
I also remember those, swings so sweet,
The lovely flowers, and rhymes so sweet,
like 'TWINKLE-TWINKLE' and 'CHUBBY CHEEKS' .

Time has passed, and I have grown,
No more swings, and no more rhymes,
but its not that, that there's no fun.
When today,I look at the children so cute,
Of three, or four, or five of age:
I can perceive the ART OF LIFE;
It's nothing great, but only this,
"WHEN YOU LIVE, DAY TO DAY;
LIVE TO GIVE, because , the MORE YOU
GIVE, THE MORE YOU LIVE !!!

MY teachers also taught me a wonderful thing;
about success; that,
"DO ANYTHING; but with THE WILL TO WIN".

I hope what i want to say is--
"WHEN YOU LIVE DAY TO DAY ;
Don't live by what people, remark or say;
"BUT, LIVE BY WHAT YOU KNOW IS
TRUE."

Finally to conclude, I'd only say;
"O my lovely school, and wonderful
Teachers,
When I'll adieu ;
I'll really, really, really,
MISS YOU!!!!!!!!

© 2017 Saumya


Author's Note

Saumya
please do comment if you think it was worth reading........i hope you'll love it

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Awww.............. very cute, but it made me sad! I loved this poem! *tear* I think my friend may be feeling the same way. She had to leave our school system because her family had to move, and she mooovvvveeeedddd reeeaaaaaallllllyyyyyy fffffaaaaaarrrr aaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyy. But, she'll be going back to our school next year, so YAY! One question... Is the poem about you, or somebody else?

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Yep, worth my reading! I loved every line. The rhyming was fantastic! This was very worthwhile and your talent is apparent.

Posted 10 Years Ago


this is really really sweet! it felt almost more like a letter or a speech though, than a poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


very sweet. took me back to my own graduation. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


One of the sweetest poems...Well done...:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Your grammar is much better in this one but there are still some details to work out. The feeling and emotions are present as always, and the reader can see you are a very compassionate person with a very uplifting spirit. This line is another example of where you need to work, "Besides those scoldings those days." because you didn't talk about any scoldings before this line so you wouldn't say 'those' scoldings. You could say, "Because of the scoldings those days" but you wouldn't put a period at the end because it is an incomplete sentence. "It needs an adjective or a descriptive term to go with it. An example, "Because of the scoldings those days, were also hard." or "Because of the scoldings those days, felt extra long." Do you see the difference. Keep working on grammar, you will soon find that success you talk about.

Posted 10 Years Ago


A five-liner stanza in a traditional poem (with rhyming scheme) is one challenging task to write. I know it as I have written one called "I Will Love You". You did it for at least five stanzas while in the other you faltered, although wasn't quite visible.
Coming to the content, it was beautiful and painful. Bidding adieu, one of the hardest things in life (or death). Well expressed. Makes a great read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


wow ... you write philosophy in your poem... you kind of hide inspiration in your poems... WHEN YOU LIVE, DAY TO DAY; LIVE TO GIVE, because , the MORE YOU GIVE, THE MORE YOU LIVE !!! beautiful.. nostalgic :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Awww......sooo cute poem, very heartfelt, made me all emotional too...

you write so well :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Nice. Ode to the lessons of the past. Also, insight to how to live each day. Nicely done! Jon.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Really cute poem I love it great job

Posted 10 Years Ago



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