Naive skin

Naive skin

A Poem by vindictivesunshine
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a take on an old story

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Standing naked in a green haven; heaven.
Soft naive skin, fresh from the muck and the mire.
Soft skin that whispers innocence,
But the lamb doesn't become sheep without sheding some red,
and for the colourblind there's no escape.
No repreave from the candle wax like rain,
but her pregnable mind, a most willing candidate.
His heresy staining a seamless creation
of the lineage of perfection and excellence.
Her emergence to a world unknown
and a relationship with the father of her woes.
History's first w***e
a title achieved undeservingly so.
But for her treachery,
she gets her favourite shade of gray
every moon cycle.
 

© 2008 vindictivesunshine


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yup, i know the story. true story!

i'm gettin very used to your style now...not that that's a bad thing. its just makes the poetry more vivid in my mind because i can grasp it better nowadays...so its actually a great thing. loved this write dude...however "...But the lamb doesn't become sheep without sheding some red" just murdered the thing! that line was epic! thanks for sharing dude!

"history's first w***e"---> *scream* you cant hate a line like that even if you tend to the belief of the w***e in question! another wicked write...

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Very interestingly written, unique and creative metaphors. Your talent is fresh.

Thanks for entering my contest and the best of luck.

Posted 15 Years Ago


The learned poet tells old stories in new ways. Always in beautiful new ways. Your word choice is elegant and spare. You write with a graceful touch.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Your piece is presents itself excellently
conveying a story of geniuneness
your wording is quite wonderful
like the sage in the wind,
I enjoyed this very much,

hope to read more from you.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yup, i know the story. true story!

i'm gettin very used to your style now...not that that's a bad thing. its just makes the poetry more vivid in my mind because i can grasp it better nowadays...so its actually a great thing. loved this write dude...however "...But the lamb doesn't become sheep without sheding some red" just murdered the thing! that line was epic! thanks for sharing dude!

"history's first w***e"---> *scream* you cant hate a line like that even if you tend to the belief of the w***e in question! another wicked write...

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Kingston, Jamaica



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