Out Of Reach but Not Completely

this rose, this red, this beauty, succulent

this tenderness, a caress, sharp, soft, crisp, this love

this passion, this will, adoration, compleat whole.

 

this place, in time, this point, together, a dance

this captive heart, a flush, this skin, a warm embrace, gentle

this soul, a strength, this hunger, a need, this life, fancefull.

 

this movement, a rhythm, this vision, a glance, wide-eyed

this passion, a desire, this fire, a trance, this trist, mystic

this pulse, a roar, this pounding, an explosion, this distance.

 

this question, a wait, this pleasure, a pain, shocking

this courage, a push, this resistance, a pull, this song, an answer

this phrase, a word, this meaning a healing, this.

 

this rose, this red, this beauty, succulent

this tenderness, a caress, soft, sharp, crisp, this love

this passion, this desire, an arrow, this target, a Queen, my love!

 

 

Reviews

[Yina]

Ooooo love the way this is witten:) I would never be able to write something like this. I'm TERRIBLE with descriptions:/ lol great write:)

[kymee]

3rd sentence should be complete, wide eyed is usually hyphenated. In the title this is how you spell completely. Not quite sure I get the poem except that it's about love. I have to read more of your poems to get a feel for how you write and think

[*Evelen*]

This is such a beautiful and sweet love poem:) well done

[Ruth]

Melting! lol
Now that is what I call beautiful! Emotions and colourful....the rose, of course, always a wonderful symbol to incorparate :)
Stunning love!
xx

[AndyJCash]

I like the structure of the stanzas and sentences :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Well written poem that has a wonderful story!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice love letter.

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Excellent write. The style of this is really unique. I love the little story each line tells, and the personal expression of your love. Wonderful poem.

[Ripple of Aqua]

I love how personal it really is to you. Written from a man who truly deserves his Queen.