Inadvertenly the Wind

White lies lead to something bigger

You open up a door
Just to let the breeze
But, in the end
Inadvertently
You've invited in
The wind

Reviews

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Short poem but it has a powerful impact. I like the metaphor. Uhm... I was just wondering, the first two lines sounds incomplete (for me) without the preposition "in".. I don't know.. Just a thought.

I love the poem, anyway. Well done! :)

[Michael G. Smith]

I purposely left it out, I find too many uses of the same word in so few lines changes the flow, already two "in's" here. Glad you stopped by.

[Avinash]

Which instead of providing relief can blow everything away. ..

[Pryde Foltz]

A short poem of a great warning. Well done.

[Rita L. Sev]

We have to be careful - a little can turn into out of control so quickly... The simplicity of this piece is its strength, M.G.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks Rita. Oh, by the way it's Michael Gary Smith.

[rutherford]

Wonderful small package. Very nuanced.

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks, Rutherford. Sometimes the simplest poems are the hardest to write.

[rutherford]

Mark Twain quote I love on this, "I'm sorry I didn't have more time to write you a shorter letter."