Spanish Hair in the Moonlight

Spanish hair playing

     Tricks in the moonlight 

Reflecting mysterious 

     From soul of aqua eyes

Speaking, in tongues

     From the dark, blazing lips

As the waiting sunrise

     Fragile, ready to break

"Take me" from night; cries

     Stretch hands beckon 

Soft as snow winds laden 

     Amid twilight whirlwind dance

Cheek on cheek arousing

     Whilst I touch cool fading mists

Swirling layers of lace gypsy 

     Where love ripples 'way

Spanish hair playing

     Tricks in the moonlight 

Upon waters overlook 

     Teasing heart's imagination  

Reviews

[TheUnrulyWriter]

I really enjoy this poem. It feels like it's happening right in front of me, even though I have no idea who this poem is about. I always love a poem with good imagery and you did a great job of that. Another thing I like is how unique the poem is - I've never read one anything like this! It makes it very personal, almost as if I'm reading from your diary!!

[Michael G. Smith]

The portrayal is thoughts of my Dominican wife Milagros as I look out over the waters on a moonlit night. I wrote this as a kind of challenge to myself. I had the title in my head and wanted to see if I could write a poem around it without rhyming. It was harder than I thought because my brain automatically begins when I write. Does this happen to you?

[Lydia Shutter]

The imagery you employ is so vivid....I could picture her. Seductive and sensually charged romantic write, Michael. I liked it a lot. Lydi**

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks Lydi, I'm glad you liked it.

[William Liston]

I'm in love with the imagery and flow of this piece. I like how each stanza was virtually uniform in detail and quality of description ... I think they'd each stand well as separate poems but nevertheless, they meld together well too. I also like the repetition of "Spanish hair playing" in the first and last stanzas. Overall, a well crafted poem.

- William Liston

[Michael G. Smith]

Thank you William. Man hath no greater inspiration in life and verse than love; be it lost or gained.

[Giulia King]

Beautiful flow! So elegant and the picture sealed in everything perfectly

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks Gullia. Once again love inspires.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Take me" from night; cries
Stretch hands beckon
Soft as snow winds laden
Amid twilight whirlwind dance"

This had an enchanting imagery with it. I enjoyed reading this. Really teased the heart's imagination ;)

[Michael G. Smith]

Thank you Yumna. With all your romantic poems I felt like I had to keep, lol.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hahah my romantic ones are probably cheesy 😂 yours has class 😉
Is it a competition going btw? 😂😂 I'm kidding, you're welcome, Michael! Always a pleasure reading your works 😊

[Michael G. Smith]

We should collaborate in the future. I'm working on piece titled your lips but I'm getting stuck. Here's a thought a back and forth perspective of two people in love trying out describe each other's lips?

[Michael G. Smith]

Similar to a tango in words?

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I would love to collaborate 😊 give me the part you've written and I'll try to work on it 😊

[Michael G. Smith]

Ok, give a couple days. I'm out of town on work and it's in my other laptop.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Cool! Whenever you're ready 😊

[Kesha]

Wow I thought this was such an elegant and wistful piece :) I really liked it, thank you for recommending

[Michael G. Smith]

Thank you for commenting. I had one less stanza and struggled whether to leave or add one more that is here. Do you have an opinion on whether a poem should have even amount of stanzas or not?

[Kesha]

I have no opinion on the amount of stanzas, I do however believe if you feel as though it is unfinished to keep working on it, no matter the end amount of stanzas.