A Pocketful of Light

Just an idea I thought of while sitting in class.

 

 

 

A Pocketful of Light

 

A glow shimmers through the threads of a pocket

 

growing bigger and brighter as time flashes by,

 

a heavenly beating emerges from within

 

light soaks through the strands of fabric

 

a glow bounces throughout a castle chamber

 

Growing brighter and brighter

 

the pocket inflates as the light grows continually

 

a loud noise files through the chamber

 

thump, thump, thump

 

the light is growing too large

 

one by one the threads untangle

 

an immense light appears and sets the castle alight

 

the beating increases in speed

 

thumpty thump-thump, thumpty thump-thump

 

the sound echoes through the dark corridors

 

gliding through castle chambers

 

the once pocketed light reaches a window

 

departure rapidly approaches

 

heading toward the heavens,

 

the beating fades away, but the light remains

 

far above in the sky

 

nurtured from the pocket of god

 

is the Sun lighting up the world

 

forever

Reviews

[Drew Wade]

this is awesome. you have such a great imagination. I would never have thought of that. really a nice piece, and it brightened my day a little bit. I really like your "thumpty thump thump's" they were a great interjection in a great piece..

I did find a spelling error, not to be critical, just to be helpful. "the light is growing to large" maybe should be "too large" ?

awesome poem. thanks for letting me read it and have a peek at your imagination.

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

How wonderful it is to let your creative mind wander through the castle and into the sky! I must tell you that I squelched my creative side for far too many years while focusing on business writing. No matter where life's work path leads you, I hope you'll continue to capture the shimmers and follow the glow. Keep that pen going! :-) Sharon

[Beatrice Boyle (Grandm..]

Truly imanginative Dana...Great job!

Beatrice Boyle (Grandma Bea)

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Creatively imaginative!

[Dani California]

Beautiful! I read this as the spirit of love... growing in us as we go through this life. Our physical being eventually passes away, yet we ascend and contribute into the light of God... which in full circle becomes and returns as light (love) for mankind. I hope that made sense.. I'm thinking it so much clearer than I am expressing it. lol

Very inspiring and creative.... lovely!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

An awesome poem. Beautifully penned.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A pocket full of sunshine on my rainy day. very nice.

[Ellen Hammond]

A nice write of imagery and imagination. I enjoy it.

[Anita B Jacques]

So beautiful, The imagination what a great tool. Your poem has a miracle (I almost wrote magical)tone to it. There is no magic with God. I just love it, thank you for sharing it with me. Keep them flowing. God Bless you.
In friendship
Hugs.....Annie

[Wolfwind Words]

That was a really cool and original concept! The analogy of how the sun came to be from the pocket of God was fantastic!
The imagery was easy to follow and carried the reader right along with every line. The light became something that could be felt with in the soul.

Great Ink!

Aaron Maycroft