Doubt

Doubt

A Poem by Cara

Do not let it slip
Out of your control 
Unwanted thoughts it brings
Be careful not to fall
Take the right call

© 2017 Cara



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Cara
This is my first Acrostic, tell me what you think

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This is not bad for a first acrostic. Not bad at all. You're strong up until B and T, which don't quite flow together with a good musicality. For D, O, and U seem like one thought (D and O definitely are), and they flow with superb musicality. B is strong on it's own, but T kind of falls flat, like it's missing a couple of syllables or something. "Be careful not to fall" is great and should be kept since it adds to the theme of Doubt, but "Take the right call", not only does it mix expressions, it doesn't seem to fit with the theme. Also, since you're making the last two lines rhyme, the rhyme doesn't sound as pleasant to the ear, because D, O and U flow nicely without a rhyme, and suddenly we get a line that rhymes with a word in such close proximity, and with the lack of musicality, it doesn't stand out with as much power to merit a finish. If you would like a rhyme, I'd suggest rhyming the last line with another line or simply fix the musicality that it shares with B. That's all. You have a great start here. Well done!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cara

4 Months Ago

thank you for your honest reply. when i started i knew what i wanted to write for D and O but when i.. read more



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Nice flow of thoughts with some logic. Thank you Cara for for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cara

3 Months Ago

Thank you for reading
Coyote Poetry

3 Months Ago

You are welcome Cara.
This is not bad for a first acrostic. Not bad at all. You're strong up until B and T, which don't quite flow together with a good musicality. For D, O, and U seem like one thought (D and O definitely are), and they flow with superb musicality. B is strong on it's own, but T kind of falls flat, like it's missing a couple of syllables or something. "Be careful not to fall" is great and should be kept since it adds to the theme of Doubt, but "Take the right call", not only does it mix expressions, it doesn't seem to fit with the theme. Also, since you're making the last two lines rhyme, the rhyme doesn't sound as pleasant to the ear, because D, O and U flow nicely without a rhyme, and suddenly we get a line that rhymes with a word in such close proximity, and with the lack of musicality, it doesn't stand out with as much power to merit a finish. If you would like a rhyme, I'd suggest rhyming the last line with another line or simply fix the musicality that it shares with B. That's all. You have a great start here. Well done!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cara

4 Months Ago

thank you for your honest reply. when i started i knew what i wanted to write for D and O but when i.. read more
This is such an amazing piece
Well you did a pretty good job in your first acrostic work..
Love to read your works..
This one is one of them..

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cara

4 Months Ago

Thank you XD glad you liked it

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