A Ballad Of Rage

Revenge is a b***h! :D

My emotions for you

 are still alive baby.

the purest of all, vengance

and the strongest of all, hatered.

I want to assasin your happiness baby

and I want to rip you apart while you are still alive

I still love you baby

even when you smile.

ahhh!! I fancy taking pleasure

in fantasies I want to live with you

piercing the rusted razor through your lips,baby

till your tears disappear.

 

I want to burn your eyes, baby

they still speak alot,

they remind me the way you loved me, baby

and how you kept me in dark.

I want to grin while I slowly torment your torso, baby

the heart beneath it is a hollow box

full of lies and fake emotions, baby

its made up of thorns and rocks.

 

Remember the way you ripped my heart, baby

remember, you pushed me to the dark hole?

I wanna pull you inside baby

and I wanna feast on your soul.

You made me the vampire I am, baby

you introduced me to trips

now, I wanna drink your blood, baby

I need a high that's evil

for the acids you had me hooked to is now what I piss.

Your memories make me nostalgic baby

I shall keep them with me,

their loyalty is not merely a night stand

nor do they make me feel sick.

I hate you so passionately baby

and I hate myself for loving you

we both deserve to burn in hell baby

me, more than you.

Reviews

[Tom W.]

powerful and vivid . nicely done . I have to disagree with the review questioning that hate is the negative of love not the opposite .
a negative and a positive cancel each other out leaving nothing .it would be hard to feel so intensely about nothing . yet oddly opposites attract be it magnetism or a love/ hate relationship as examples. this is most nice work expressing the yin/yang nature of it all without pullig punches.
minor glitch in your spell check it is hatred not hatered in the fourth line

[Sukriti Suki]

Oh this is really good. The flow of this piece is exquisite. Powerful words. Very well written.

[roarke]

Just when you think you can't squeeze anything more out of a "love" poem, here comes Serpent... I was drawn in to this piece with a harsh rope around my neck and then I couldn't stop reading. Great creative perspective here, great flow in the concept. This is the original passion. Somehow, a box of chocolates just ain't gonna say it any more.....

[Celeste21]

This has an Edgar Allen Poe darkness about it. It is alarming but passionate. Calm but striking, how you managed to blend the four is beyond me. Very intriguing.

[GreenSkeleton16]

kinda scary! Very cool poem! "for the acids you had me hooked to is now what I piss" i really liked that line. Very powerful and it really shows the anger toward that girl.

[Dream Weaver]

Frenzied passion in a nutshell..
This is the woman your mother
warned you about.. Fangs and all…
A splendid write indeed!!

[Ruth]

The acceptance of our errors through desire and lust are all too painful at times! Excellent piece! xx

[TamiViolet]

Oh, so passionate and wonderful... I can feel the fire... Wow can I feel the fire :-) You want to get rough with her in a major way.... You're angry but you want her bad, yes?

You describe pure lust brilliantly although I understand how the writer wants her, yet at the same time....hates himself for wanting her in a way that is so darkly, so secretly beautiful....

'I wanna drink your blood, baby/I need a high that's evil/for the acids you had me hooked to is now what I piss'...

This write is a turn-on,,,haha. I think it's my mood tonight...or you for arousing my yearning spirits...remembering lust like this... Isn't it really just lust though? I mean, does love take this form? Your technique is awesome!!!

[Dream Slave]

Oh the dark side of affection, once again found. Very good to see something like this. It brought back memories of thoughts after the hardest heartbreaks I have had to overcome. As always, very impressive and the pictures painted on this canvas were so livid, I felt like I was there.