Save me! (Poem)

Your words cut deep in my heart.

So deep, that the bleeding doesn't stop. 

So deep, that tears don't stop spurting from my eyes.

Your attitude stays put when in a party, but get's loose when we come back home.

You take out your belt and start to whack me as if I'm an animal in a zoo. 

I yelp in pain as loud as the kazoo.

Fresh wounds start to appear all over my body. 

I have to treat them so I don't have to show nobody.

You always tell me to keep my mouth shut or you'll divorce me and let me and my family suffer.

And you'll just continue to be a duffer.

But now... it's enough! 

I need to show the world how you "actually" are

And all it takes is to just rip the mask off your face and your true colors will be revealed.

My family may suffer, but they'll be happy to know that I will soon heal.

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime bad situation look safe and after the escape. We learn. We should of ran sooner.
But now... it's enough!
"I need to show the world how you "actually" are
And all it takes is to just rip the mask off your face and your true colors will be revealed.
My family may suffer, but they'll be happy to know that I will soon heal."
The above lines are true for many people. Accepting less for too long. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Coyote! :)

[JessyJacob]

very truely said, there should be control, but not too much. the blood should flow with viscous nature, but not blown like high BP.
everyone inside, is good lord, which we cover our face with bad lord, and then we look confuscious, as in confusciouness, time is best over lord too, because gravity only can pull towards them, but time is that power which is always yours that heals and gives time to heal. I feel gravity and time are two perfect things, like parents which in turn paves the way to themselves to become parents again, a viscous cycle, but drivers are true soul that connect with lord. thank you, you review, is what I thought while reading. but wrote very nicely, may be I can't write with that malleable nature, positive over negative , vice versa.
writer, I really agree you as a philosopher. I just remind clay potter, making a beautiful lady, like a sculpture, little pieces need to be rocked out, while in that process. I really adore your patience, which is bearing a high force of withholding, which can be released by a great effect of time, you moved with smartness, but with emotional touches, you really took care of the One, nicely, though little tears but managed with hope and talk.

[Great Aunt Astri]

.... and very logical, too! (;

[JessyJacob]

I dont know, why "Logic", is looked as artificial, it is other meaning for relationin a family, paternal, maternal, state wise, national, green earth. It just goes to galaxy. I am sorry, my mistake for any hurts.

[Poetic License]

Good heavens. I have been there. This was a tough read for me, so close to home. I can't really offer a technical review, I can only express a personal understanding.

[Mr.Writer]

Oh! I'm really sorry Poetic :( No problem at all
I really hope that you recovered :)

[Great Aunt Astri]

Did she ever leave him? For real ? Or in her imagination? You have dealt with this subject very vividly in your poem. Well done.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much! :) I'm glad :)
You can think the way you like to :)

[JessyJacob]

I think question should be He ever left anybody? Yes he needs that love from everyone, who is also a punisher, deep inside, to save the victim. He needs his simple things, like how a crazy dog be I.g tamed as pet doggy, kaiser. endha? manasilayillai? enikkunnu. (just words came out of my memory , which is short term, to face short tempered.) thank you to everyone in this page, may not be my friends. someone is missing someone, by me. its not spiritual like 7 , one soul after another with continuation.

[matrixmark]

Woah! some very powerful images which left an imprint on my mind. I have a book called 'behind closed doors'and this piece which you wrote reminded me a lot of that book.

Some sad yet very Powerful and striking images.
It's a sad society we live in to think that these things happen. People who wear masks to the outside world and become that monster underneath behind closed doors should be ashamed of themselves.

Poweful stuff.

Mark.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much Mark for the review!! I know it's a sad society we live in, it's sad to see these things actually happen. Thanks once again! :)

[matrixmark]

No problem.

Mark

[matrixmark]

Your title 'save me' - quite an intresting one. It beggars the question - Who should be saved - 'The punisher' or 'the victim' - Obviously BOTH need help in their own different way.
Just though I should put this out there.

Mark.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Mark! :)

[Stacy Purvis]

I am stunned. Is the fact or fiction? Is this really happening to You?
Excellent read, and I, of course will pray for you.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you Anastasia! :) This is fiction, I've been writing this from what I've known happens in the world, in different countries and am trying to spread it across in this poem

[Farhan Shaikh]

It is truly awesome to read..

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you!! :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's a deep topic you've come up with. Sadly the end is not as easy as you portray here..
Well penned.

[Mr.Writer]

Thank you so much!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome 😊

[Zenovia]

Your words cut deep in my heart.
So deep, that the bleeding doesn't stop.
So deep, that tears don't stop spurting from my eyes.

Quite deep words..
many of them face these issues...
who dont come out in open about it.. thanks for sharing

[Mr.Writer]

No problem! :) Thank's for reviewing!! :)

[Zenovia]

i posted something check and let me know how it is..