I give up (Poem)

I give up (Poem)

A Poem by Mr.Writer
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Sunshine and rainbows... That's all that he wanted from reality

"
I GIVE UP
BY: MrWriter (Shaan)

Sunshine and rainbows.
That's all that he wanted from reality
But he got over that as his harsh life passed by, drowning all the happiness inside him
He now was a 24/7 machine, working and working day and night
Having no time to let his emotions get the best of him, let alone smiling
The positivity and energy he had before all went down the drain
He only had one wish, and that was to be happy
Unfortunately, life couldn't give it to him
He waited for many years but never got it
Sorrow seemed to overlap it as years passed by
While writing day and night in his diary, his emotions may seem to pour out, but they get drilled back in
He keeps on asking for happiness, expecting it to come any moment, but it doesn't 
But he won't accept that...
He just WON'T

"Oh life... I've always appreciated what you've done for me... 
Just please do me a favor and find me some happiness... cause I can't seem to find it anywhere, no matter where I look.
If you expect me to try again, I won't, cause I give up!"

Sincerely,
Shaan

© 2017 Mr.Writer


Author's Note

Mr.Writer
Hey guys! Haven't written for a while actually, so this might not be so well done :D
Any feedback is really appreciated :)

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I really like this.! The way you've given it out is so good that it touched my heart hard. I really felt it.

"If you expect me to try again, I won't, cause I give up!"

When life strikes too hard on us we all want to give up..! But we must not because later on we will repent.! You've written the truth of the stressed life.! Perfect.!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you Hiru!! You've understood all the things I conveyed in the poem...
Thank you for th.. read more
Hiru

6 Years Ago

You are welcome.! :)
This really touched my heart, Shaan. It's so emotional, relatable and emotive. It's sad but very touching. Really nice piece :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you Tina! :) You're amazing!
I really enjoyed this piece, the title says that you're done but towards the end its a different perception, enjoyed these lines

"But he won't accept that...
He just WON'T"

Dont let life knock you down!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much Kesha/Ahsek :P I really appreciate it :)
Kesha

6 Years Ago

You are welcome !
Honest, strong and hard thoughts. You took the reader with you. Made them feel your thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you Coyote! :) I really appreciate the review :)
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
You get what you give. Happiness is a choice. If you want something, you have to go get it. That is the way it is. Nothing is a guarantee and nothing is handed to you. ; )
Thank you for sharing! x

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

I agree Anastasia, thank you for reviewing! :)
Please check out the synopsis of my new book .. read more
Well, let me say one thing, Sorrows are needed Shaan to know the worth of happiness...
And I hope every sad story teaches lessons and ends up with happy tears in your eyes filled with happiness...
I enjoyed your write..:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thank you Surya! :) That's very true, sorrows do lead to happiness.
That's interesting. You say you give up but there is still hope in your words, like you still haven't in real. Might be that you're emotionally blackmailing life 😉😛

I think it depends on us whether we want to be happy or not. It's us who is in charge..

This was a good piece. I really liked the lines:
"Sunshine and rainbows.
That's all that he wanted from reality"

Well penned, Shaan! 👍

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Lol :D Then Twilight's a no... :P
I'll start with Angels and Demons probably.
Thanks f.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

6 Years Ago

Cool! And when you finish do tell me if you liked it 😊
Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

I will Yumna :)
Seeking happiness is what we mostly do but to find happiness and make others happy gives us true happiness I believe. I liked this one it is relatable and shows human nature.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Very true Najam! :) Thank you for reviewing!
Najam Us Saher

6 Years Ago

You're welcome ☺
Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

I posted up a sypnosis on a new book I'm writing :) Please do check out when you have time Najam :)<.. read more
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Life gets like that
once you acquire a position
it is demanding
and we long for that moment
finding the soul again

that is where happiness is

really well done

Posted 6 Years Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

Thanks so much Solace!

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