My human clone (Poem)

My human clone (Poem)

A Poem by Mr.Writer
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Thunderful...

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Those thunder-like cries
Coming straight from my eyes
Trying to consume me

My heart, already broken;
leaving my heartbeats to be unspoken
And never heard from again

Darkness approaching my soul
Starting to drill a hole
Changing everything 

Everything around me fading away
Turning into a shade of a grey
Within seconds

My reflection unable to be shown
Instead, showing photocopies of my human clone
As my organisms clash together

The sky shattering apart to the furthest
Its clouds falling onto the surface
Landing straight at me






© 2017 Mr.Writer



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great little poem, certainly a connection with the words and very clear imagery :)

Posted 1 Week Ago


Mr.Writer

1 Week Ago

Thank you! :)
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Bre
This is such an emotional poem and I love it.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

3 Months Ago

Thank you Bre :))
Aloha, this is full of emotion and feels almost frantic in part. A palpable mood creeping through each line. Very well done. Izzy

Posted 5 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much Izzy! :)
This is well written in the way it paints the imagery and flows in its musicality (Stanza 5 Line 2 is a tad wordy, though). I also like how only the first two lines of every stanza rhyme, and then the stanzas end in a straggler (what I call ending lines that don't have any rhymes). However, ending the poem with a straggler doesn't sound good in certain occasions. And this occasion, if I may, is one of them. Somehow, the bang advisable in an ending is not met. Well done otherwise!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much Emi for the review and feedback! I really appreciate it!! :)
I kinda agree,.. read more
emipoemi

5 Months Ago

it was my pleasure.
The first line caught my eye and drew me into the poem. it was well written, but perhaps not my genre. Keep writing!!!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

5 Months Ago

Thank you so much!
You are a Precious Soul...Your Soul is a Bright Light for all to see!

Posted 5 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

5 Months Ago

Umm, thank you? lol
Anastasia Purvis

5 Months Ago

Ummm, you're welcome? heh
This was a great piece, i liked the rhyme scheme you had going on!

Posted 6 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much Kesha! :)
Great job I really like it :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Months Ago

Thanks so much! :)
I can feel it, expressed it really well

Posted 6 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

6 Months Ago

Thank you Farhan! :)
Another great poem Shaan.
Thanks for sharing this.:)


Posted 6 Months Ago


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Mr.Writer

6 Months Ago

Thank you Neetha!
No problem :)

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Added on June 11, 2017
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Toronto, Ontario, Canada



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First of all... I love to write! It has always been my passion to write since... last year! :D I can easily pour my emotions in writing without telling them to anyone. I love to review people's work.. more..

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