But when?

But when?

A Poem by Mr.Writer
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But when...?

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I need a hope
a reason
to live in this world

I need someone
to hold my hand and tell me
it's going to alright

Someone who could love me;
all life and never
leave me alone

Celebrate every moment
of happiness we get
and cherish it to our fullest

Twirling me around 
on the dance floor
and picking me up when I fall

Doing the simplest things with me
like talking walks around the park
or going shopping with me

Having beautiful children
and deciding on names
for them , together

And at the end of the day
being with me again as we say
how much we appreciate each other









© 2017 Mr.Writer



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That's what everybody wishes to have in their life...Very simple and beautiful write.
I loved it.

Posted 3 Hours Ago


This is very beautiful and the sentiment is wonderful.

Posted 22 Hours Ago


Mr.Writer

21 Hours Ago

Thank you Mae! :)
The companionship feel is deep and well written.

Posted 1 Day Ago


Mr.Writer

1 Day Ago

Thank you! :)
In need of energy...almost everyone at some point in lives need it...It was honest Shaan and I enjoyed it...:)

Posted 4 Days Ago


Mr.Writer

4 Days Ago

Thank you Surya! :)
I thought you're quite young to really think on these lines, Shaan :P lol ;P

Nice read. I agree with Carol, it does read like a prayer...

Btw, it should be 'it's going to be alright' in the 2nd stanza last line...

Well penned.

Posted 4 Days Ago


Mr.Writer

4 Days Ago

Haha I am pretty young to think about it indeed, but it's alright :D
Thank you Yumna!! :)
YumnaKay

4 Days Ago

yeah that's what I think ;p
you're welcome :))
it could be..''it's going to be alright''

and instead of a someone that could love me..it could be,''someone who could love me all life and never leave me alone''.
so these were two sort of sentences i found...overall the poem is amazing..such beautiful imagery..keep writing.

Posted 5 Days Ago


Mr.Writer

5 Days Ago

Thank you so much Wajiha for the feedback and review! :)
Clear yet deep, well expressed.

Posted 5 Days Ago


Mr.Writer

5 Days Ago

Thank you Sonnie! :)
A dream is a wish your heart makes... This truly explained it. So sweet and made me smile. It was a good write and it was a feel write. Hope you find that someone. Good luck

Posted 5 Days Ago


Mr.Writer

5 Days Ago

I agree with you!
Thank you so much Heart :)
heartspeaks

5 Days Ago

you're welcome
This was a very clear poem. A real dream from the heart of one wrote it. Good poem. A real keeper. Do some more.

Posted 5 Days Ago


Mr.Writer

5 Days Ago

Thank you so much Joanna! :)
I will do more
A special someone can be the solution to all our problems.
You expressed it well through this.
Good work Mr.Writer!

Posted 5 Days Ago


Najam Us Saher

5 Days Ago

Now you're thanking the right person. 😄
Mr.Writer

5 Days Ago

Hahah true :P
Wajiha Nayeem

5 Days Ago

lol yes...

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