To be in your shoes... (Poem)

To be in your shoes... (Poem)

A Poem by Mr.Writer
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The pressure to succeed

"
If only you could understand
how it feels like
the pain, the agony
and the need to succeed

Everyone relying on you, alone
to win for all of them
keep the country proud
and it's head up

Applause's heard from miles away
to boost your spirit up
and if you make a mistake
rocks and taunts thrown at you

Feelings hurt and energy drowning
adrenaline rushing harder then ever
trying your very best to cover up
for that one mistake you made

Everyone think's its easy
then why don't they try
so they can understand how it feels
to be in your shoes











© 2017 Mr.Writer



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Wow, I've totally felt this way. This poem is so relatable. Thank you!

Posted 4 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

4 Months Ago

No, thank you! Glad you could relate :))
You are trying to send the awareness of emphatic thought on this one ey? Well, very well written there my friend. Through a poem is such a great way of releasing that sense of humanity to all of us. Beautiful.

Sincerely,
CAPOLAVORO

Posted 9 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

9 Months Ago

Yeah, I'm really glad you could interpret meaning of my poem! :)
Thank you so much Capolavora.. read more
Well written, friend..one who thinks that's easy must try first, so that they can understand it.
Loved the poem.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much Priyanshi :))
Wow! I definitely liked this poem! How well you portrayed your thoughts, and the overall idea of it. I especially liked the fith and third line, how quickly people are to criticize you even when they've never tried. It was a really good!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much Sam! :))
The pressure to succeed, is indeed one which can bear a heavy burden on the shoulders. The last bit of your piece is the one which I connected with. I know it was a short piece, but again this was another piece of yours which had such good depth to it and was really well worded. I only wish I could produce such poems, but alas I never will be able to compete with poets like yourself who always seem to have a great knack of putting over such meaningful words.

Great piece AGAIN mr writer. Always a fan of your work.

Mark.

Posted 9 Months Ago


matrixmark

9 Months Ago

Welcome.
The only poem I ever did was a comical laundry poem and somebody thought it was real.. read more
Mr.Writer

9 Months Ago

Why not! You should Mark, we'd love to read it!
No problem Mark! I'm really looking forward t.. read more
matrixmark

9 Months Ago

Maybe one day.

The book comes first.

Mark.
Sounds like me... Everyday people judge me for what i am... and for who i happen to be. but none seem to understand me... not really. Maybe this poem grabs me in a way as it speaks of how it must feel for me. That maybe people should walk and live my life. Walk in my shoes. Be in my shoes so they will at last understand the very pain that i withstand and go through... every single day. Maybe they should see it as if they're seeing me. That way... maybe they'll know what it's like to be in the shoes of another person. Remarkable poem. Very solid and memorable. Relation: To how i feel at times. BRAVO!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

9 Months Ago

You're beautiful just the way you are Joanna :)
I so agree with you as well! Using a quote fr.. read more
"You either die a hero or live long enough to see yourself become the villain."

It's just how we are: eager to root for you but also eager to rail against you if you fall.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

9 Months Ago

I agree with you Mr.Write!
Thank you! :)
I enjoyed reading this :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

9 Months Ago

I`m glad you enjoyed! Thank you! :)
woah...
amazing write.
so much strength it had, keep it up shaan!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

9 Months Ago

Thank you Wajiha! :)
To be in the public eye ones faults and failures are the focus of their interest in these modern times. So you last stanza gives impact making your poem linger in your readers mind. Nice depth, the only problem I have with your poem is I wear a size 15eeeee shoe :~) Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 9 Months Ago


Mr.Writer

9 Months Ago

Haha, thank you Bear! :D

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Added on July 30, 2017
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