My Shadow

She's always there

By my side

She never runs

Never hides.

When the sun

Ends the day

No more can she 

Come out and play

Cause now she has

To run away.

Reviews

[Dusty]

Its well written, but has alot of room for improvement. A story can be told here. Who is "she"? What is she running from? What is your relationship with her (ex: Family, Lovers, etc.)? I thought some words were forced in there for the sake of rhyming only, and "come out and play" seems very childish while I think this poem is going for a more mature feel. Try experimenting a little bit, get out of your comfort zone. Ignore the rules you think you know about poetry for a bit, just write without worrying about rhyming or fluency, all of that can be added later. Best of luck to you! I look forward to reading more of your work. =)

[Jennifer Marie Theresa ..]

I really like this one =]

[Cassandra D.]

I loved this poem. I liked the end "Cause now she has to run away" lol
I liked it!

[Andrew'sWonderland]

Cute Short Poem! I just love it!!

[Wolfe Greytome]

This flows wonderfully, though I wouldn't go as far as saying that it is a wonderful piece. It is however, a well written piece.