Strange

Strange

A Poem by iamshadowine

Loud wind,

Ice cold,

Three layers of coats on,

Fog smoking out of mouth.

As I walk down the gray stone road,

I find I creepy house.

Trees dancing,

Water dripping,

Wooden logs broken,

Spiders crawling

I knock the door,

I ring the bell,

“Hello? Is somebody in there?”

Door opens,

Sound creeps,

Window panes bang,

Darkness increase

I look for light switches,

But I can hear only my footsteps,

As I take another step,

I step on a soft thing kept by.

“Meow” the cat sounds,

I scream,

I run out of the house,

And I see the name plate beneath,

‘Mr. Kitty, since 1926 till

Eternity’

© 2016 iamshadowine


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This poem made me give a small laugh. Simple yet very enjoyable.

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

Thank you!
Well, that was an enjoyable read. I will admit that I'm not the biggest fan of the way you ended it, but hey, it still works, and it did a bit of a chuckle out of me (in a good way). I don't know why, but it just felt rushed to me, but more than likely I'm wrong. Anyway, good job. Keep on writing, my fellow writer! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and leaving your honest reviews :)
DoormanDan

7 Years Ago

No problem. :)
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It was a sort of fun read, well penned.

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you :D
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7 Years Ago

my pleasure :)
Love it!!!
You did an awesome job on this!!
Keep it up!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

Thank you 😊
Interesting twist on a classic horror theme.


Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

Thank you 😊
This piece appears to have captured many imaginations. The form, and clipped words, work in its favour to build suspense.
I would think I find I creepy house is a typo? (a creepy house), as well as I knock (on) the door?
and a soft thing kept by doesn't translate well -- perhaps a soft thing near by?

Posted 7 Years Ago


Ohhh....this is very suspense from the beginning to the end..
I enjoyed it very much..
Nice one....

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you :D
Quite fascinating. I sure do enjoy the spookyness of it. Great read!:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you! :D
What a uniquely mystifying piece...grabbed my attention from beginning to end, original and very cool :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

thank you :D
Nice poem. I particularly enjoyed the ending and how it added to the creepiness of the entire narrative. For a moment, it felt like the suspense was being followed by a drum roll. Nice one Shadowine.

Posted 7 Years Ago


iamshadowine

7 Years Ago

Thank you! :D

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