Soft Whispers

lost love

 

Soft whispers

like rainbows after the rain

memories of love

 long ago held close

to my heart forever

as sweet reflections

etched permanently in my mind

indelible ink

never to be erased

tears have flown

like lonely rivers

calling out your name

in the soft whispers of the night

the sound of your voice echoes still

to the most inner parts of my soul

wishing I could look into your eyes

just one more time

feel my hand in yours

but ours, a  forbidden love

from long ago

still burns today

in my memory

 

©  bj smith

aka shallimarRose

Author's Note

critique welcome. Thank you for stopping to read. shallimarRose

Reviews

[ShelleyA]

Hi shallimarRose. A lovely write about lost love. Well crafted free verse. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are done well. Nice use of enjambment. Very nice use of simile: "Soft whisperslike rainbows after the rain" and "tears have flown like lonely rivers" - good descriptive comparisons. Deep expression of emotion. Feelings of sadness and regret permeate this piece. Well penned. Write on!

[shallimarRose]

Most thankful for your critique Shelley .. Thank you for reading.. shallimaRose

[ShelleyA]

You're welcome and my pleasure. Have a great day!

[Trevor Jay Bloodworth]

Love has always been one of the most central themes of poetry. Good job. I liked the lines "the sound of your voice echoes still/to the most inner parts of my soul."

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Trevor... I appreciate your coming to read.. shallimarRose

[Jack...]

I found this very beautiful but sad. Love that needs to be kept hidden for it is forbidden can be the most rewarding and the most painful love of all. Very nice my friend.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Jack... Yes because its a love that could never be fulfilled therefore the memories are always bittersweet when recalled. Rose

[Ellie J]

A simple, sad poem of the lost love a person wishes never became lost in the first place. Good job.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you for reading.. xo shallimar

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem of regret. Those old memories are permanent scars we hold precious in old age. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[shallimarRose]

hmmm... I was just reviewing one of yours as well..lol Maybe its because we both cant sleep? lolread morehmmm... I was just reviewing one of yours as well..lol Maybe its because we both cant sleep? lol
Welcome to the Cafe Coyote and thank you.. shallimarRose