Opal Stars, Velvet Dreams  ( collab with Jack )

Opal Stars, Velvet Dreams ( collab with Jack )

A Poem by shallimarRose
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I asked Jack if he would do a collaborative piece with me.. He kindly accepted ... Here This is our finished project... Five stanzas are Jacks five are mine.. can you guess which are which? enjoy!

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My thirst now deep ~ I long to quench

to sip this periwinkle wine

In goblets cut of harvest moons

and passion’d pleas now cast of time

 

Tender kisses ~ sonnets placed

on fevered lips near rainbow streams

in golden castles made of sand

I've knelt beside you in my dreams 

 

As whispered winds ~ I've called to you

before the dew of morning beads

and sunlight forms the eastern star,

in measured breaths of tempted needs

 

In rustled leaves ~ I've heard your voice

beneath the dark where crickets play

that echoed through my aching heart

complacent to the light of day

 

From mountain top ~ my vision soars

‘cross fertile valleys emerald green

In search of perfect precious love

a-midst this beauty I have seen

 

Beyond the shades ~ of here and now

I've felt your breath beneath my skin

I've tasted sweet your tender smile

and felt the longing deep within

 

For in this mist ~ of moistened glow

the heart reflects on distant wing

In melodies of long ago,

desires silent evenings bring


With opal stars ~ I write your name

in shimmered streaks across the night

where ebony velvet curtains fall

in passion'd dreams of sweet delight


And now we stand ~ together pure

a' glow this jasmine moon above

fires of a single flame

among the rhyme of written love


Wishes fly ~ on gossamer wing

far beyond perpetual clouds

and evening finds us lost again

 in precious love forever vowed



collab by shallimarRose and Jack...

August 2013

 

 

 

 

 

 

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© 2013 shallimarRose



Author's Note

shallimarRose
Feel free to comment /critique... but.... this is my my first collab here so be kind...

photo from Google Images
Special thank you to Jack for agreeing to share is art with me..

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Oh my... I am speechless, left breathless....
I am a romantic at heart and was so very delighted to have found this....
Love how each stanza flowed and fed off the other...wonderfully in sync...
With every line my heart did sigh....Thank you....
Thank you both and happy to meet you....a pleasure....
A truly masterful work of art!


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

Thank you Lily.. Its a pleasure to meet you too and to have you read and enjoy. shallimarRose


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This is lovely. I love the classic feel to this gorgeous poem. I would never guess this is a first collaboration. It is breathtaking!
:) Julie

Posted 1 Year Ago


shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

Thank you Julie, Yes I am hoping there will be more.. Working with Jack was effortless and everythin.. read more
Oh my... I am speechless, left breathless....
I am a romantic at heart and was so very delighted to have found this....
Love how each stanza flowed and fed off the other...wonderfully in sync...
With every line my heart did sigh....Thank you....
Thank you both and happy to meet you....a pleasure....
A truly masterful work of art!


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

Thank you Lily.. Its a pleasure to meet you too and to have you read and enjoy. shallimarRose
Great work, folks. I can see the growth from then to your current project, Rose. Bravo!

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shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

lol... you're so funny.. xo
Really sweet and romantic! This piece had a magical feel to it. Great piece you have here :)

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

Thank you Siren, shallimarRose
ohhh Rose!!! you are equally ad good as Jack cos I couldn't tell who did what stanza. this is so good and nicely done. Keep writing.

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Cassie

1 Year Ago

Your welcome and i will be waiting, I love the name Shallimar. I can borrow it for my coming daught.. read more
shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

congratulations.. I was hoping one of my daughters would name a daughter that but they didnt. Let me.. read more
Cassie

1 Year Ago

I definitely will, she is still so small..
Well done! As I have said to Jack before collaberation is hard but here it was effortless. Each stanza was like a call and response. I enjoyed the balance very much between night and day/light and dark. Excellent rhyme scheme (for both) and true musical meter.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

Thank you Steve for taking time out of your weekend to read here.. What a lovely review.. Rose
What a beautiful poem... a wonderful collaboration. This is harmonious and well crafted. Bravo!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

Thank you Sharon.. So happy to see you come and read.. xo Rose
Awesome, best duet I've ever heard sing. This was in all honesty, one of the best poems I've read of late, and for it to be a collaboration as well but to still be such a great harmony of thoughts and styles, is even more impressive. Great job guys.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Astro

1 Year Ago

You are welcome, and yes she is, as are you too!
shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

Thank you Astro.. It was nice for you to take the time to read and comment.. We have gotten good rev.. read more
Astro

1 Year Ago

I'm sure of it, this one is a gem SR!
A very beautiful collaboration indeed. this has an ethereal feel to it, almost an 'out of body' experience...must read it again !...Maggie

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shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

Oh I am so glad you enjoyed it Maggie.. Yes it does have that out of body theme almost where perhaps.. read more
This is a classic rendition in the timeless tradition of the Romantics, you two... Byron and Keats would be fans! As someone who has made a complete hash of conceptual ethereal love, I take my hat off to you, my friends - you`ve maintained the outworldly atmosphere throughout whilst still showing your own very individual identities...I`m not going to say which I think is which! Bravo Rose and Jack! P.

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shallimarRose

1 Year Ago

Thank you Pete for such a wonderful review. I am so pleased you could see the individualism while n.. read more
Jack...

1 Year Ago

Pete, your knid words are greatly appreciated. I had a wonderful time writing with a poet as talente.. read more

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