The Token , two hearts one love... (kleenex required)

explanation within.

This was a challenge picture... Just an empty locket...It started out as something very different...a poem about betrayal but as you know sometimes the muse grabs the pen and takes right out of our hand.......This took a very unexpected turn as I wrote and my favorite song came on the radio....It somehow split between years and decades and became two separate poems conjoined by love, time and circumstance.......If you have never seen the video "Just a Dream" by Carrie Underwood (and even if you have)** please take three minutes grab the box of Kleenex and watch the video after you have read both poems for the full emotional impact of this presentation...

Thank you., shallimarRose

THE TOKEN

(Two Hearts One Love)


In tiny box

in the bottom of her old dresser drawer

beneath her satins and lace
she kept it safe

wrapped in memories and tied with tears

was a tarnished remainder of one love

a little thing really no bigger

than a copper penny

a small token once given

so long ago

It was the night of their senior prom

she was all dressed in pale blue

the color of his eyes

her body trembled at the sound

the doorbell ring

he was there

she was ready

tonight would be the biggest night

of their young lives

she topped the stair with grace

he walked up and met her half way

a small embrace

hand in hand he led her down

where he gave it to her

right there in front of her parents

a small silver locket

it was tied onto her corsage

"I LOVE YOU”

he dropped right there to one knee

he asked her to marry him that night

and she said yes

and her mother cried

and her father held back tears

there was no ring

just this tiny locket

two small conjoined hearts

silver in color

etched with love

the locket was empty

the two small hearts awaited

they awaited the day of the wedding

when two pictures would be added

one in black the other in white

bride and groom

pictures that she would cherish

hold forever in her hearts

and near her heart

she would someday show this locket

to children and grandchildren

and tell them of this day

when he dropped to one knee

and this locket gave

as a token of his undying love

bj smith

aka shallimarRose


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Two hearts
(the token part 2)


The day was set

the timing planned

forever they would walk

through life hand and hand

the venue was chosen

invitations were sent

something blue something new

something borrowed was lent

the day planned outdoors

would be sunny and warm

he would wear his uniform

she a white veil

and a gown of white lace

she dreamed of that day

and the smile on his face

****

but somewhere between

his life and her dream

came the duty that called

him to arms

a marine

and this locket

two hearts

as the way this poem started

were left empty and bare

she was left broken hearted

she never did marry

no one could compare

to the memory left

by that boy on the stair

sixty years to the day

since the locket he gave

and they placed today

beside her in her grave....

bj smith 

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Author's Note

love your thoughts on both the poems and this emotional video. thank you. shallimarRose

Reviews

[Traci]

One word.....AMAZING! This is definitely one of my favorites of yours! It reminded me a little of a "Notebook" kind of style, written so eloquently as you captured the emotions throughout. The first part portrayed the perfect kind of love we all hope for, high school sweethearts, with big plans for the future. The second portrayed "somewhere between his life and her dream", a bittersweet ending. As for the song, always been one of my favorites, still shed a tear or two every time I hear it, and will always think of this poem when I hear the song :)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Traci.. on my other site many kept this to their favorites or in their notebooks.. I loved the movie "The notebook" xo Rose

[FlatLineBeauty]

I cannot in words express how much this poem touched me. It was lovely and made me cry to be honest. I could picture the motions in my head from beginning to the very end. The song at the end fits perfectly too.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Rose.. The poems actually turned like I said and my muse came out because of that song. I am glad you enjoyed. I still cry every time I see that video and I have been watching it for years.. xo Rose

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The locket and the story of love and tragedy...I see you did this in two parts...giving the reader a then and now...of how this unfolds in the lines...you can relate...since even in the present time this is happening to Marines...thanks for choosing us...in your poem...and the happy ending is not always the importance of the read...but what reminds us of the value of life and the untold story that is brought back to life...

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Glen. Yes, this was actually going to be two seperate posts and about something completely unrelated but my muse had ideas of her woen.. lol
I have the utmost respect for Marines well and all branches of service too and first responders.. thanks again for reading. Rose

[Glen Yumang Manese]

You're welcome...good to read you...and the invite...to this....one...