Empty

For the "Empty" Contest

Empty

 

she lies awake silently awake

wishing on a forbidden stars

pondering her value

hushing hidden scars

 

swollen eyes want to bid farewell

 she wishes on broken dreams

in boredoms tomb she’s locked away

she is not what she seems

 

forlorn and  somber sightings

you may have seen her there

she flew amongst the Ravens nest

and carved her own despair

 

her laughter is insanity

her smile beguiled a king

her death would be untimely

 remorseful mourners sing

 

bewildered are the watchful

they know not what this means

to sit and watch ones life become

divergent with her dreams

 

she could not face reality

her mind beyond repair

burned beyond the edge of faith

her gaze an empty stare

 

 

© bj Smith

Aka

shallimarRose

 

 

 

 

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Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

There are those who are pushed to the point of no return and feel as if the world is but an empty stage upon which they dance to a silent tune. Your thoughts convey this emotion of total despair! When we are unable to face reality, then the mask remains in place.

[shallimarRose]

thank you sheila.. xo Rose

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Wishing on forbidden stars -- great line!

This was a fantastic write, my friend. I feel the emptiness, but in emptiness we find that we suddenly have a chalice that is ready to be filled. The emotion of this one is so powerful, and you have shown your soulful colors in sublimely poetic fashion.

[DaughterofHonor]

Love it. Love the way your writing flows.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you very much for stopping to read.. shallimarRose

[Pryde Foltz]

When one is used to that which they abhor the soul is robbed. Very profound write, BJ.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Pryde.. for taking the time to read and connect with me.. Rose

[Pryde Foltz]

My pleasure.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she is not what she once was, she mattered...but now she feels empty, useless...lost her faith...the swollen eyes become totally vacant...she just stares...

that is madness.

this poem depicts it so well.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Jacob.. I tried to respond to this earlier but my computer keeps freezing.. xo Rose

[shallimarRose]

I am having big computer issues and cannot edit . I know there are type'os and i cannot fix them.. :(

[redzone]

pushed over the edge... too many share this fate... "her gaze an empty stare". your poem evokes empathy and wanting this pain to end. ---redzone

[shallimarRose]

yes...................................flat-lining now.. :(
thank you for reading redzone... I will come out of it I always do.. much respect.. Rose

[redzone]

sorry Rose please accept my warm (((((shallimarRose))))) hug... be safe and well..... ---redzone