Poets Heart

just penned this and I know it Needs work..

A Poets Heart

 

he soars with eagles

oceans rush is his to paint

on gossamer wings she's set afloat

love bestowed the angel saint

 

each tree a masterpiece he has known

the rose so magical bows her head

a princess writes of golden throne

he paints in shades of ink that bled

bewildering chronicles made of time

sonnets from their inner yearns

tailored psalms flow so sublime

boisterously mute the paper burns

 

chevron spectacles within his grin

gifts of wonderment frame her face

signs without reveal pain within

poignant feelings that fill up space

 

tear stained paper, hurt inspired

chartreuse letters on painted signs

or sweet romance from love desired

fantasy and reality meet in time

 

freely flowing, love or rage

filling up their book in part

heart and soul blend on the page

pouring from the poets heart

 

bj Smith

aka shallimarRose

 

 

 

Author's Note

thoughts?

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Rose, your heart comes through in multicolored images in this poem...yes, our tears stain the page and we commiserate because we trust we one another's hearts. "Boisterously mute" what a great way to describe the emotions we hide between the lines.

Just a couple corrections....

Line 1...should be soars, not soar
Line 3...should be wings. not wins
Line 7...should be throne, not thrown


A pleasure to read your words! Lydi**

[shallimarRose]

thanks I was aware and already changed some of them....I . took this from another post and having trouble editing here.. I think its my server. thanks lydi.. xo Rose

[Lydia Shutter]

Not easy to edit on WC. I try to have it the way I want it in Microsoft Office before I copy and paste it into WC. I knew you would want to know...figured you had posted in a rush. Lydi*

[shallimarRose]

Re posted in a rush.. Yes dealing with some emotional baggage so not in the editing mood really. The thrown was that dang spell check.. I hate that damn thing.. My niece on facebook was trying trying to say your postings and hit the U in stead of O and the spell ck changed it to "your p***y".. lmao she was mortified.. thanks again.. Rose

[Lydia Shutter]

OMG....that is really funny, but I can understand why she was upset!

[shallimarRose]

not upset.. embarrassed lol Im the one that was upset.. angry at first as a matter of fact. lol

[Keith]

I do believe that ShallimarRose's poetic heart indeed has a repertoire all of the above. Most of lesser poets only aspire to a few lines or maybe even a stanza of what you describe so wonderfully here.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Keith.. **blushing** xo Rose

[ron]

I love this one Rose. I have felt the same way at times...more lately than before. My heart cries for you I know how you feel.

[shallimarRose]

Yes Ron the poets hart is a bit more open I think and vulnerable. Thank you for reading. Rose

[ron]

Yes it is, at least that's how mine is and i get the feeling a lot of us are like that.

[Michael G. Smith]

Beautiful, sorry got a tear on the screen. Now, after reading this I want to be poet more than ever.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you MG for pausing here to read. Perhaps you are. I wrote poetry and rhyme/lyrics for over forty years before I realized I was a poet. lol Rose

[Michael G. Smith]

I'm an infant, Waaaaa! See, lol

[Michael G. Smith]

been writing three years.

[shallimarRose]

LOL well some poets are born poet's and some like you just enjoy writing and reading poetry and so they ""decide"" to be a poet. I suspect at some point you had already been writing .. maybe letters and poems to a gf as a teenager? song lyrics? Little rhymes spoken to the kids? Just curious.. Rose

[Larry Dyson]

hi,just thinking I really like this phrasing ..question...one of the "he paints"...maybe a different synonym for paints...?.."oceans rush is his to paint

on gossamer wings she's set afloat

love bestowed the angel saint



each tree a masterpiece he has known

the rose so magical bows her head

a princess writes of golden throne

(His artistry brushed?)in shades of ink that bled

[shallimarRose]

I will consider these thoughts Laury. .. Let me look..
thank you.. xoxo Rose

[Jvl narasimharao]

It is is really great tribute to poets.As john keats says "poets are the dictators of the world" they dictate the world with a pen.They can see what the sun can not see.You have a style distinct from some ordinary poets like me.There is grace,poise and beauty in whatever you write.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you for reading and your very nice comment.. shallimarRose