Dear Diary

 

 

Feeling explosive yet somehow content

The air around me is still

the warm sun drawing it near.

A mist fills my hunger,

yet I am not satisfied.

I drink 'till I am almost overflowing......

The sun fades away,

dampness casts gray shadows

I feel the lonely cold.

It makes me feel angry,

yet I am not sure why?

When I can no longer contain myself

I strike out in vengeance......

thunder roars.

Lightening pierces right through me,

yet I don't feel a thing. numb

Flood gates break loose

and I cannot stop the flow of my tears.......

I know that soon I will cease to exist.

When my anger has run it's course

I will feel emptiness

Will I simply disappear from existence.

My strength subsides and I become weak.

My last expression of strength

nothing but a trickle......

Morning is nigh and I see the sun peering

as I gasp one last breath.

I find myself wondering if I will really be gone

or will I just change like a chameleon

from once dense and gray to fluffy and white......

One thing is for sure,

I know one way or another

I will be back........

"diary of a cloud"

bj smith

aka shallimarRose

Reviews

[redzone]

if only clouds could write with such lucidity of the feelings and experiences of sadness and pain we face... if this were the case then, looking skyward would help us to ease our pains and share with clouds a healing course.... alas, we are left to our own devises to discover the hows and whys and cures for a cold hearted world... I love these lines, maybe cause I have felt them but more cause you are able to capture how this feels: "I know that soon I will cease to exist./When my anger has run it's course/I will feel emptiness" why is it that sometimes we are driven because of our anger?? and why do we feel empty, alone and hopeless when the anger is gone?? shouldn't we feel happy, or at least relieved that we have feelings? anyway Rose, thanks for the diary entry for clouds, it quite neat to feel the wettness while wandering through its mists... ~~redzone

[shallimarRose]

Thank you Red for reading and your very nice review.. hugs, Rose

[Antoñyo]

I agree, very clever piece....I was reading and thinking, "this is different for Rose" but after the last lines, "This is sooo Rose." Amazing piece, cleverly-written!

Thanks for sharing!

[shallimarRose]

Yeah.. I love to hit ya with that Zing in the end.. Kind of my thing.. Thanks Anton.. hugs, Rose

[Antoñyo]

LMBO! You thrillseeker you!

You're very welcome!

[s y e]

This is clever, Rose - A great piece for sure. loved it

[shallimarRose]

Thank you sweetie.. Rose

[ron]

This had me going. I thought it was about being angry, and than in the end it was about a cloud. Nice write Rose.

[Michael G. Smith]

You had me wondering what this was about. You gave me a little smile at the end when all made sense. I think it's 24th line, you want the word nigh.

[shallimarRose]

Thank you , Yes I will fix that.. xo Rose

[SyberRose]

I love this...an amazingly creative piece Rose:)

[shallimarRose]

Thank you CRose.. for the read and review.. Rose

[Keith]

Clever write, never saw that coming! Another ShalimarRose piece that we are compelled to reread in an entirely different light after all has been revealed. But equally enjoyable second pass. Keith.

[shallimarRose]

lol Thank you Keith for reading. So glad you enjoyed it both times.. hehe Rose