Virtue Of Life

What life am I leading?
Worst than the pain of bleeding!
The truth within me that I sustain
Ends in mere failure and just pain.

I work just hard and even harder,
Wish I could’ve stayed as a toddler,
The loneliness to which am being pushed,
Is not what I want and have always wished!

When every plan I initiate wholly fails,
Its like the paroxysm puts me on sharp nails,
I still try hard, not giving up my hope,
Still I find only fiasco and no better scope.

Is this the plan that god has for me?
Does my success have no better key?
God or me, whom shall I blame?
For things are always not the same.

When no one around fathom me better,
This thought just makes be feel bitter,
To myself I shall keep all my problems,
Feel like not trusting even my close chums.

Though I trust in god and myself,
I shall put all my problems in the shelf,
To make it an experience for my future,
Within me this power of withstanding I shall nurture.

This feeling of hurt and failure will make me strong,
Cultivate the experience and will never let me go wrong,
“The stone that bears most hits, becomes a beautiful statue”
This thought in my mind I shall maintain as my life’s virtue.

Will never let my failures impede my success,
Keeping this in mind, towards my goal I shall progress,
I trust in god and will never let my heart break,
For I know life is not a piece of creamy cup cake!

Reviews

[The Water Queen]

Very good write.

[rachielle]

I applaud you for this piece. The words you used were incredible, the rhyme was indubitably great, and the substance was very powerful. Again, I commend your optimism. Here, it shows that even when you're hurting, and feeling repeated failures, you could still stand up. I believe that is what makes you strong- knowing that life will not be an easy road to tackle. This mindset will take you places. Great job!

[HorrorMaster]

very good

[Wicahpi]

LoL no but I love cup cakes!
There are some good analogies here.
You can always find the child living in the heart.
Peace n Light

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a sense of lostness.. of desire to go back to a time of childlike joy as life take its hits against you.. Yet in the in, through all the wondering and blame, you give us a courageous hope to go on. Thank you!

[Doreen]

I like that there is such strength in this. The message that life is hard, but I will not be knocked down is terrific. Nice read.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a poem the truly expresses just how hard life can be. There are times when we feel like nothing in our world is going right now matter how hard we do try. I have felt like this time and time again in my life. This poem completely expresses the frustration and emptiness that life can cause. the flow of this poem is easily followed and the word choices are great ones.

[Manda]

awww this is awesome! good job!

[Joy Lynn B.]

Wow this is a very good piece!

[Ferg]

a wise and touching piece. well-written!