Break The Bottle

Stand up
Stand up and fall

Fall
In the eyes
Fall in the eyes of alcohol
But stand

On the ground

Stand up
And count

Count

The empty bottles
That fall you

Your honour

Empty the bottles
In the gutter

Make not
A stomach of your gutter

Get the guts
To stand up

And count

On yourself

Stay away from the ground
Bury the bottle
But not in your stomach

Stand up against
The bottle
Stand up
For yourself

Shy away
And make the bottle shy

Fight

And break
The bottle
Not yourself

Break the bottle
On your hand
And stand firm

Someone please

Cleanse my blood
The alcohol poisons
The poison of pain
Which poisons
The poison of love

Someone help
Me

Stand up

Author's Note

Just playing with words...

Reviews

[realmwriter]

I can certainly attest to breaking the bottle; to break the habbit, to break yourself from taking another drink...! I grew up with an alcholic mother, bottle always in her hand or at her lips... A lot of heartache came from that bottle and from her delerium of alcoholism. It is a painful slap in the face of past resentment and a hurt that will forever be in the back of my mind. But today she drinks no more and I have forgiven her for the pain and the abuse she put myself and my siblings through due to heavy drink. Today I have my mother back and I am most greatfull that she was able to finaly break the bottle...!

[stars are far]

nice one ...

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Mind blowing Piece... Nice to go through..

[Amila Jay]

cool:)

[CT]

I've never actually known anyone who's struggled with alcoholism well, but some very close family members suffer from other terrible addictions, and it's the same thing, though obviously different circumstances. The thing I really like about this poem is that it's natural- it doesn't try to be a good poem- it just is, which I believe is the crucial difference. Good job.

[Teri B]

Fighting alcoholism, as fighting any other addiciton, is an incredibly long and often painful process. The battle gets easier but is never "won"!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

This seems to be related to alcoholism, at least that what I get out of this. Its a harsh reality. Know too many people dealing with it. Great write!

[Jeremy Baker]

Playing or not this is an outstanding write!

[EMF]

You really hit the nail on the head. Thank you. Not only that extremely well written with clever verbal twists and turns that make reading it aloud a true pleasure. As much as reading it on the page.

[Rene Velez]

great right on a serious disease and subject...well done. (I meant right)