I know what it feels like just to want to be needed in another persons life or just to acknowledged by that person. Or at least thats what I get from this. Thank you for the request.
This is like the other one of yours I reviewed. Confusing, but then again, not confusing. And amazing. And awesome, and well, just really good. You are a very talented writer, and I love the different way that you write your poems. I've never seen them in a form like that, and I really like it. Thanks for the read request!
Wow, the last line is most haunting, "Someone please soften the grasp..." The helplessness feeling of the victim of abuse is very evident in this poem, very strong writing, awesome.
I enjoyed this piece actually. I don't know if I like the use of the phrase "dance me" but I really liked this one. I can relate to it through its collision between pain and pleasure, an inner conflict not commonly represented or at least I haven't found many.
I especially liked the last line "Please soften the grasp" it made me feel the narrator's conflict with a phrase that sounds as if it were whispered.
I also liked the dance of these words, "Let me oscillate/between the good and the bad/ Let me dance/ amidst the crowd of oblivion" it gripped me and pulled me into a pleasant waltz lol.