Unnoticed and (Slightly) Unseen

wrote this for a contest

 

The blank white image-

You could stare for hours and learn…

Maybe nothing

Or maybe you’d notice that it isn’t white

That in fact it’s a very light shade of peach

But then you could notice the crack on the edge-

Small yet, appearing to lead a parade of slightly

Unnoticeable lines-

Lines that were left behind by the

Brush that installed the pale paint upon

The precious

Sheet, defined as an image

 

But then, who’s to say that if someone

Left behind a small yet easily noticeable

Dot-

Defined by its black nature

Noticing that your pale eyes are drawn

To that dark dot

Watching as the black appeared to spread like a virus,

Or fire

On fuel- watching it as its veins

Creep out destroying the once peaceful peach sheet

That was unjustly defined as an image

Reviews

[EVERYTHINGyoucantelltoS..]

i am fairly sure that i've already reviewed this, but i really like the idea... and the last sentence. It makes it really complete and ties the thought together enough to end the piece but lets the readers carry on the train of thought...

Small yet, appearing to lead a parade of slightly

Unnoticeable lines-

Lines that were left behind by the

Brush that installed the pale paint upon

The precious

Sheet, defined as an image

...technically, i liked all of it,... but i liked above and below the most...

Defined by its black nature

Noticing that your pale eyes are drawn

To that dark dot

Watching as the black appeared to spread like a virus,

Or fire

On fuel- watching it as its veins

Creep out destroying the once peaceful peach sheet

That was unjustly defined as an image

(unjustly)... liked it... very much so at that...

[darkgurl]

To that dark dot
Watching as the black appeared to spread like a virus,
Or fire
On fuel- watching it as its veins
Creep out destroying the once peaceful peach sheet
That was unjustly defined as an image

I like these lines, this is wonderful, like the style of this write well written.....Kim