Suicidal

One day Mary felt lonely, she felt suicidal.
She opened her Macbook and connected her Viacom to it.
She drew a picture of a pair of legs hanging in mid-air.
Her skill was sublime, she did a perfect job with the drawing. She posted the picture on Instagram. 

The picture got 500 reactions, several comments, a few likes (She unfriended them immediately);
Her phone kept ringing on and off for the next half an hour. She felt better. She didn't wanna kill herself anymore. 

The End 

Reviews

[Pragati Chaudhary]

Your Poem in my way :

One day Mary felt suicidal
while opening her Mac book and connecting Viacom, she thought of sketching a pair of legs hanging mid-air.
Her skill was sublime & a perfect job was done
the picture got 500 reactions, several comments and a few likes on Instagram.
Her phone kept ringing on and off for the next half an hour.

She felt better laughing out loud
Of course; Dying was not an option, now!

[Ashwin Shanker]

This is great... I will post this on my wordpress and give U credit

[Pragati Chaudhary]

It's fine - Its your Poem after all

Take the credit :)

[Ashwin Shanker]

No no... Edited by Pragati...

[Pragati Chaudhary]

Ohh Thankyou soo much then :D

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful ending to the story. True friend come to us when needed. Thank you Ashwin for sharing the amazing story.
Coyote

[Diane]

I wasn't sure how I felt about the poem at first and to be honest the title rubbed me the wrong way. So I cleared my head and took a deep breath and read it with a clear head. My favorite part is where she doesn't want to die. She did something something about how she was feeling. I would say she was strong and knew what she wanted from the start. Good job.

[costa siwale]

suicide, always an interesting theme.
This was different, different good.

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you for the review

[Madhavi]

Because we feel that no one love us anymore is where the suicidal thoughts come from..Loved the poem

[Ashwin Shanker]

I feared backlash from many people, but glad that many liked the work

[DDaKiller77]

i honestly believe this sounds like a middle school looking for attention but you explain that she is suicidal and that she was needing motivation to stay.


my last review was childish ignore it

[Ashwin Shanker]

Hahha... thats okay. Thank you for the review :)

[Pragati Chaudhary]

Plot is good but I think
I would write the same Poem in a bit different way!
Use of "She" is done a lot of times which I think is not required & I also don't think you need to use "The End" at the last! - Its understood!

Rest - Cool :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

those we leave behind suffer the worst...and we never really know how much our lives impact others...
sort of like A Wonderful Life depicted..

excellent write here...love the movement...
j.

[Ashwin Shanker]

Thank you for your review Jacob. I completely agree with the point that you have made above, Which is why I feel that Suicide is really a SIN.. There should be no sympathy for those who do it.