Compartment 114
Compartment 114
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Hey Sunshine

Hey Sunshine

A Poem by shandi

Don't wanna wake up

Just to do it all over again

Roll into work a little late

Just to spend the day

At a place I hate

Hey sunshine

You know it could be worse

 

They walk right by me

Wish I felt like saying hello

As we drag around this place

Wonder if they feel like me

You couldn't see it on their faces

Hey sunshine

Don't think you're the only one

 

There's a hole in your shirt

No good for a yardsale

I bought that for you, you know

Now you're married with a son

Cuz I broke it off two years ago

Hey sunshine

Believe me, I've let it go

 

Just kinda feel like driving

But maybe it's the leaving part I like

Just to be heading somewhere new

Don't wanna believe it

But I've got things to do

Hey sunshine

The world is still your oyster

© 2008 shandi


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Its going to be in my favorites. Its the best in the present form too but if you could somehow make the last stanza a little more effective or dramatic or something. Just a wish/suggestion (and I am not sure if it would turn out to be even better if you change the last stanza).
Its such an extraordinary poem. Thanks a lot for sharing.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I think when this was written you might have felt a little blue. I think that is what makes it so good. Unfortunately, the strong feelings that come from being blue seem to bring out some of the best poems.

Gus

Posted 14 Years Ago


inspired by the moment realizing the world is still for the taking and always will always be if the heart
acts upon the offering is intriquing and speaks a somber, sad depth that carries an undertone of uplifting sentiment using a sweet reciprocating thought" hey sunshine" as a reflective statement, which gives
a romantic cloud, the way the thoughts seem to float in the form focusing on every day life events.
a great poem, thanks for sharing your talent

Posted 14 Years Ago


Strong but mello. Awesome


Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Its going to be in my favorites. Its the best in the present form too but if you could somehow make the last stanza a little more effective or dramatic or something. Just a wish/suggestion (and I am not sure if it would turn out to be even better if you change the last stanza).
Its such an extraordinary poem. Thanks a lot for sharing.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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shandi
shandi

Bakersfield, MO



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My name is Shandi and i live in a little town in southern Missouri. Im 26 years old, no kids except for my best 3 legged k9 friend Poodie, and never been married. I was recently engaged for a year to.. more..

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A Poem by shandi