Cannot Bring Me Down

Ever just fall so hard for someone?

Cannot Bring Me Down

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Cannot Bring Me Down   5/13/09



Wow...that's a pretty mouth.
The kind I want to explore.
The stars told me of your grace.
The moon is in a jealous rage.

Oh god, that's a pretty face.
The kind I'd like to embrace.
Somehow you managed to erase 
all my previous mistakes.

So I sit, close to you but not close enough.
My old muse left because I couldn't stop staring.
I count the beat beat beats of my heavy heart.
The butterflies have gone gone gone into overdrive.

I grew up with the hopeless hope of true love
and soul mates. 
Lies to be sure, but just
subtle enough to believe in.

I feel you are the one, the one I can stake
my life on...the one I cannot control,
and don't want to. 

Not you, not ever.

Flash me the smile that shatters matter
and flows through me like electricity.

I fear that this will end before I tell you
vital things of an intimate nature.
So I am here to settle down for good.
With you near or beside me, watching
my back and fixing all my flaws.

( Flaws you fell in love with )

As the rain falls down like angel's tears
I look up and snicker at the stormy sky.
Nothing can bring me down from your
specific high. We laugh a knowing laugh, 
and kiss long and deep.

Our white umbrella somehow levitates
above our head as we rise toward
the open floodgates of heaven.

Reviews

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Amazing rhythm. I so love the flow

[Jamey]

Thank you so much!

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Such a loveable and rather amusing write :) I particularly enjoyed the last stanza, vivid imagery! Starz

[Jamey]

Much appreciated! I particularly loved that part!

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of description. You made person and situation come alive.
"As the rain falls down like angel's tears
I look up and snicker at the stormy sky.
Nothing can bring me down from your
specific high. We laugh a knowing laugh,
and kiss long and deep."
I did like the above lines. Good to know perfect place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Giulia King]

"Oh god, that's a pretty face.
The kind I'd like to embrace.
Somehow you managed to erase
all my previous mistakes."

A really good poem! I've read it over and over again

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

I count the beat beat beats of my heavy heart.
The butterflies have gone gone gone into overdrive.- fun to read!

Flash me the smile that shatters matter
and flows through me like electricity. - powerful imagery!

As the rain falls down like angel's tears
I look up and snicker at the stormy sky.
Nothing can bring me down from your
specific high. We laugh a knowing laugh,
and kiss long and deep.

- I like this stanza for three reasons;
1. The first line was touching.
2. The word snicker, reminds me of Snickers lol, which I love!
3. The last line. Using the words long and deep shows the kiss is on going, not that it stops when the lips touch.

The last stanza of the poem was my favorite, great imagery and way to end the story!!!