I taste sin.
The mistakes of my life I taste.
The regret I swallow.
All that I have done wrong
Heavily laying in me.
I cry to repent.
I long to make it right.
Wish I could take it back, start another life.
Wish I were better.
Wish I could do right.
But there's one thing that can make it alright.
Bowing down tightly strained
Mistakes flow out of me
All the filth, all my disgust pours out.
All that I have done wrong
Finally gone, finally right, finally clean again.
Pure I am, once again.
Until I partake of another sin.
Fantastic poetry. I love the words for their literal meaning.
I think it's fantastic how something this simple can explain something so complex.
A little criticism would be to disallow yourself from creating the really long stanzas unless you plan on doing it throughout your poem.
Not to be broad, but its all good to be a little sinful. Shouldnt.be so hard on yourseld
Eat a cheeseburger kick back and watch some cartoons, life.is good. :-)
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There is a certain element of emotion in being harsh on oneself. Although kicking back may be desira.. read moreThere is a certain element of emotion in being harsh on oneself. Although kicking back may be desirable, the emotion is certainly missing.
I liked it! We've all been there before, inner reflections of things we're not proud of but non the less they still come back to taunt us, to lure us in to that feeling of shear abandonment when we crossed that line of lust and desire at one time or another in our lives. Bittersweet memories, followed by remorse and repentance of the things we've done or given into over the years. I find myself still haunted by these lustful desires of the past. But at the same time relieved they're behind me now.
What great courage displayed; I hear your message, by our mistakes we learn and evolve. What is sin? The one that applies to all is not being true to the situation; the way out: accepting my life as it is.
these reads almost like an extremely personal poetic prayer for the individual soul~ clear and concise presentation allows the general reader to relate to the poem~ well done~
Somehow I get the feeling its a tad more complex than this... for simplicity's sake you've presented a resolvable end to a problem that doesn't seem to be letting go.
I have such a love for poetry. Writing poetry has been such a help and escape in my life. My writings are generally about my depression, eating disorder and addiction. more..