Goddess Not I am

Its about me.......

 

 

I am what I would have wanted to be,

I am the aspiration of myself.

 

I am a butterfly when I want to tickle the flowers,

I am a bird when I want to compete with the flecks of cotton overlapping the sky,

I am the river when I want to mock the stand-still mountains,

I am the sand when I want the turbulent sea to rest on my shoulders,

I am the rain when I want to splash in the puddles,

I am the rainbow when I want to paint the bland sky,

I am a mother when I want to love selflessly,

And I am me when I want to be free.

That’s what I am,

Everything.

Because I am blessed to be,

To be a poet.

And imagine the world of me.

I AM FREE & UNBOUND.

 

 

Reviews

[A.J. Smith]

This is absolutely wonderful...what an amazing piece of writing! First of all, your keen intellect and creative mind (both qualities I am drawn to in a writer) are clearly demonstrated. Secondly, I love your structure and flow. Thirdly, you paint such fantastic images with your precise use of language and words.
Perhaps the only change I would suggest would be to consider dropping the word "at" from this wonderful line: "I am the river when I want to mock at the stand-still mountains." I look forward to reading all of your future work. Thank you for asking me to read and comment on your work. Please send more!

[Judy M Cox-Rouse]

Imagination is the key to life. This is the heritage to time. Wonderful. Beautifully wonderful!

[Indira]

beautiful is the word

[Imperfection]

I think this one is my favorite of all that I have read of you.
Strong beginning. And the power in your words carries on till the very last line of the poem.

I agree with Candle in the Wind about the title.
Other than that, this is a magnificent piece of work.

[Rain]

Reading your writing is contagious. Aw, to be where butterflies are free to roam in your mind. I love your style.

[Candle in the wind]

Prehaps the title could be " Goddess I am not"

[Candle in the wind]

This is the most beautiful way of floating by with a picture about yourself it justifies your name "floating on the feathers of a dandelion" because here your spirit is truly unbound and free. This poem has delicate evocative etheral wings of aspiration and imagery.

[Kees Kapteyn]

This is your anthem, in a sense- i like the line about the bird competing with the clouds!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Deja vue....I know I've read this before somewhere... maybe in my contests. Wonderfully written, and expressive in this peice.


Great Write,
Rayne

[TL Boehm]

this is a beautiful poem. Uplifting and positive. Your friend was right.

[Angela H.]

What wonderful imagery this is. Bright and breezy and full of the wispy, etherial fabulousness (!) of being a poet. This lifts me up. Nice write.