Perhaps you loved me anyway

Perhaps you loved me anyway

A Poem by Floating on the feathers of a dandelion
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I got a quote which said Just because someone doesnt love you the way you want them to, it doesnt mean that they dont love you with all they have and as I read this I felt a spur to write...

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I wanted you to look at me with drooling eyes,

When I dressed up for you.

But you preferred not looking at me at all,

You never noticed my new dress,

You never noticed those dangling earrings,

You never said “You look beautiful!”.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

I wanted you to sit beside me and whisper in my ears,

When I saw other couples immersed in each-other.

But you always preferred a place not beside me,

May be you had something more important

In mind than to sit beside me,

May be you dint have anything to whisper,

Mostly I sat alone, wishing.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

I wanted you to wait for me on the breakfast table,

And have your first bite with me.

But you always left before I could reach the table,

May be you have some undone work at office,

Or may be an important meeting with the CEO,

I never had my breakfast so.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

Sometimes I wanted you to surprise me,

Take me out to dinner or a late night movie without being asked for.

But you were always caught up in something to ever plan a surprise,

I waited to feel special and important in your life,

I waited to celebrate so called important dates in our lives,

And waited for a surprise.

You never made an effort.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

                                

I wanted you to curl up around me,

Like a quilt on those chilly nights,

Snuggle beside me and make me warm.

But you preferred sleeping on the corner of the bed,

With your body turned towards the wall,

And the bolster clutched between your legs.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

                   


© 2008 Floating on the feathers of a dandelion



Author's Note

Floating on the feathers of a dandelion
I haven't worked on the language as such and didn't do proof reading as well, wrote it as it came to my mind.

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That one had caught my fancy too among those quotes you had sent and that kind of consolation is so essential at times and this truly is a spontaneous overflow of "unpremeditated thought".I can feel it on my pulse.
Just a few suggestions:
"When I saw other couples indulged in themselves"
Perhaps you meant engrossed.
"I never had me breakfast so"
Perhaps it should be my break fast

It quite evidently was a strong spur that you felt.
"May be you dint have anything to whisper"
This line brings such a sense of desolation.



Posted 9 Years Ago


8 of 8 people found this review constructive.




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Nice write,

Posted 6 Years Ago


i really love how you wrote this one its simply amazing!!!!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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ZeN
the candor is quite palpable.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Wow. This was a beautiful write, really it took my breath away and I loved every moment i spent reading it.
-Cathrine

Posted 7 Years Ago


The poem is very good. We need to be needed and appreciated. Sometime a friendly reminder can help. Description and story was excellent. Problem with life. We miss things when it is too late. A excellent poem.
Coyote


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This one is so beautifully sad! I love it, like I do all your works! And the words are so real for me....you know that I think.....thanks for such a heart-warmingly honest piece! Great work!

A few typos/grammar flaws.....but great nonetheless! Love you!

God Bless!

Posted 8 Years Ago


God how many times I've felt like this in a relationship. Great writing really captivating

Posted 8 Years Ago


I can very well connect to this poem.. and loved it just the same.. :) very well said........

Regards,
Poetic Soul

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a beautiful poem. I can insanely relate to it, because I've been in a relationship where I was sworn to that "I love you, I really truly do," but it was never shown, much like the man you're referring to in your poem. I absolutely loved this poem. You did an amazing job. I didn't even quite notice the typos because I was so enthralled in the piece. Great job!!! :]

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very sad.
Lovely.
Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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