Perhaps you loved me anyway

Perhaps you loved me anyway

A Poem by Floating on the feathers of a dandelion
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I got a quote which said �Just because someone doesn�t love you the way you want them to, it doesn�t mean that they don�t love you with all they have� and as I read this I felt a spur to write...

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I wanted you to look at me with drooling eyes,

When I dressed up for you.

But you preferred not looking at me at all,

You never noticed my new dress,

You never noticed those dangling earrings,

You never said “You look beautiful!”.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

I wanted you to sit beside me and whisper in my ears,

When I saw other couples immersed in each-other.

But you always preferred a place not beside me,

May be you had something more important

In mind than to sit beside me,

May be you dint have anything to whisper,

Mostly I sat alone, wishing.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

I wanted you to wait for me on the breakfast table,

And have your first bite with me.

But you always left before I could reach the table,

May be you have some undone work at office,

Or may be an important meeting with the CEO,

I never had my breakfast so.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

Sometimes I wanted you to surprise me,

Take me out to dinner or a late night movie without being asked for.

But you were always caught up in something to ever plan a surprise,

I waited to feel special and important in your life,

I waited to celebrate so called important dates in our lives,

And waited for a surprise.

You never made an effort.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

                                

I wanted you to curl up around me,

Like a quilt on those chilly nights,

Snuggle beside me and make me warm.

But you preferred sleeping on the corner of the bed,

With your body turned towards the wall,

And the bolster clutched between your legs.

But perhaps you loved me anyway.

 

                   

© 2008 Floating on the feathers of a dandelion


Author's Note

Floating on the feathers of a dandelion
I haven't worked on the language as such and didn't do proof reading as well, wrote it as it came to my mind.

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That one had caught my fancy too among those quotes you had sent and that kind of consolation is so essential at times and this truly is a spontaneous overflow of "unpremeditated thought".I can feel it on my pulse.
Just a few suggestions:
"When I saw other couples indulged in themselves"
Perhaps you meant engrossed.
"I never had me breakfast so"
Perhaps it should be my break fast

It quite evidently was a strong spur that you felt.
"May be you dint have anything to whisper"
This line brings such a sense of desolation.



Posted 16 Years Ago


8 of 8 people found this review constructive.




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"But perhaps you loved me anyway." line could've easily become annoying or repetitive but the way you write it this statement just becomes more and more powerful each time until towards the end it's pushing for reactions, for tears, blatant emotions.

I love how you've underscored the Not's and no's. Together these two parts of the construction complement each other and shape the reader's perseption and understanding of the piece... Very well done, very heart felt and true... boy oh boy it hit hard and deep.

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

the wanting and the waiting...is so painful. This i know well. This was a beautiful write and I am honored you shared it with me.

Posted 16 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Wow, sad work but very true. The dream love is hard to obtain, harder to keep and difficult to lose. Well done.

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

this brought tears to my eyes...like you have been watching my life unfold.
Beautiful write to such a painful scene...

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This is the epitome of optimism in a relationship.....one cannot help but feel for the speaker.
A very melancholy tale well penned.

Posted 16 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Such an emotional write.........and yes, perhaps in their own way they love you anyway, but
surely love is action not just words.......and I feel such a sense of loss reading this that
no effort was made to show that love...............maybe he loves as much as he can.........thinking its enough............I felt very sad reading this, beautifully written.

Posted 16 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.

This is a real eye opener here - perhaps he did love you any way....but when it is not the way you want to be loved - will it ever be enough? Is asking for more - something more than we should ask? I like the questions here. Seems like simple -easy in love kinda things were wanted - the sharing of a life and love.... but when they are not considered or answered....well maybe that's as much as he could love.... I refer to 'maybe love" in a couple of my poems - it does exist....much to my regret.....

Good question here.

Kath

Posted 16 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.

That one had caught my fancy too among those quotes you had sent and that kind of consolation is so essential at times and this truly is a spontaneous overflow of "unpremeditated thought".I can feel it on my pulse.
Just a few suggestions:
"When I saw other couples indulged in themselves"
Perhaps you meant engrossed.
"I never had me breakfast so"
Perhaps it should be my break fast

It quite evidently was a strong spur that you felt.
"May be you dint have anything to whisper"
This line brings such a sense of desolation.



Posted 16 Years Ago


8 of 8 people found this review constructive.

This was sad but lovely. I liked the underlining of the word never and then perhaps. I think everyone fells this way, and yet some are more lucky then others, in that they get their dreams. Anyway I enjoyed reading this piece. It is well written and has a pleasant flow. Great work.

Posted 16 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

I agree, this is very well written and very sad. The repetition of the last line works to perfect effect. Excellent write. NH

Posted 16 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.


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