Awakening

Dewdrops sparkle bold
On the crimson petals of a rose
Trapping sunlight gold

Damp and dark soil breathes
Whispers to the silent sleeping trees
Donning misty wreaths

Night melts into dawn
On a massive canvas of grey void
One bright globe is drawn

Welcome songs of birds
Filter through the fragrant morning air
Sweeter far than words

Stealing slumber deep
I wake up to my reality
And my dreams do sleep

Author's Note

This was initially intended to be a haiku string...but the way it came out, it turned out to be something else...so I chipped away at it a little bit, and turned it into a modified haiku format, with two extra syllables... 5-9-5 instead of 5-7-5...

Reviews

[José Humilde]

Very nice poem. I am digging the flow, for sure. Enjoying the rhyming scheme as well. I like the imagery that you have in this. Crimson isn't a word that I use to often, so it was a breath of fresh air, if you will. :)

My only question/comment is with the last line. It left me kind of confused. What exactly did you mean by it?

Thanks for sharing!

-JH

[Sara]

lovely poem, the words shine with brightness and a sense of a fresh start :)

[Abdul Aziz]

Like I've already told you, mate, this poem rocks!

"Night melts into dawn
On a massive canvas of grey void
One bright globe is drawn"
Brilliant!

I love the way you've played with the rhyme scheme here. Short, mellifluous sentences to keep the rhythm going.

And like I've told you before, I think the last three lines can be made better. Its not that they aren't good. I just feel that the poem needs a stronger ending.

Awesome write once again, mate!

[J.Black]

I love the words you choose, especially "dewdrops " ! Just the first word alone drew me in. Oh and then again in the second line with "crimson"! - SEE, this is what I love about this piece- you keep it going that the reader wants to keep going on to witness what will happen next. Imagery flows elegantly amongst my screen and in my mind plays just like a movie. LOVE THE CONTRAST!

[truth]

I love this - I wake up to my reality and my dreams do sleep. Again you show contrast and the parallells of life thanks again

[thatbryngirl]

ohhhh this is just beautiful:) its so soothing and peaceful:) i love nature and so this is like my favorite:)

[An owl on the moon]

There is a wonderful connection of a life to nature's wonders, coming alive in spring... Your use of colors and the music of the world enhance the beauty of this lifting write. What a joy to read!

[Mae Morales]

I really enjoy this piece of poetry, very well written