Hold On Japan...

This song was written to share the pain that Japan suffered after the disastrous earthquake and floods following the nuclear plant problems...

One dream,One realization
One hope of recreation
Lets not forget we are one
Pray for all, everyone

A reckless storm, a stroke of breath
A rain of blood, a streak of death
Only debris float in the flood
As smoke rises from boiling blood

Don't let go, hold onto my arm
Let me pull you out of this swarm
Don't let go, hold onto my arm
This time for the sake of Japan

It makes me weak when I see them dying
I can hardly breath when I hear them crying
Why to sit, instead of trying
Because dark clouds will keep on flying

Take a stand, they are starting to fall
Resurrection aint possible for all
Provide a shelter, some food, a home
A gift of love and care to some

Don't let go, hold onto my arm
Let me pull you out of this swarm
Don't let go, hold onto my arm
This time for the sake of Japan

Reviews

[Knight, not a Saint]

A real great one!!....excellent!!!
Great expression of feelings.....Only thing i would say is,though i know rhyming's not necessary at all....but u can do something more in the 5th stanza bcoz the other stanzas are just beautiful & the level of this one can be made to be at par with the other ones!!!....
You write grt buddy!!

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Sure ! I ll take a note of that !! Thank you :)

[Abhishek Ramchandran]

Thumbs up!!!!! awesumm poem!!!! this is surely what i want in my library..... :) :) :) :)

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thanks buddy

[Marie]

Wonderful to think of people trying to help others in the time of desparate tragedy.

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thank you

[hardscoper6]

Wow! Very moving, and well paced. The lines work into each other perfectly, i love it, keep it up!

[Treo LeGigeo]

Beautiful. The pace was great, and the rhyme worked very well.

Just the first line, I think there's a formatting error in "One dream,One realization."

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thank you ... I try to edit the first line

[Craba]

Goodness, this is very poetic, and deep as well as powerful.
You did one splendid job writing! Simply amazing, makes one
ponder about their own misery,well written!!!!